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Follow the Tears
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Follow the Tears |
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Daniel J D Senior Member
since 2000-10-01
Posts 1471Hillcrest, Queensland, Australia |
Follow The Tears. Watching the tears of my broken spirit Streaming along meandering endlessly I gaze upon my confused frown, shattered Moved to the window of the rising sun I watched in awe a lonely sparrow Shaking in the early morning rain Raindrops running along its weak body It seemed to ask me to stop the rain I walked outside to face another day Bent from the wind across my path forcing me to stop, was a new rose I straightened it, as a drop of rain fell From its heart into my hand. Closing my hand I kept that moment I know that another day will come When the tears from my eyes And the raindrops will meet again As the wonder of nature unveils The real story of sadness Telling me to follow the tears For at the end of that journey There will be a beautiful lake Made of tears and raindrops Where angels and butterflies meet Where rainbows begin their journey Into the hearts of the hurting And sunrise last forever Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love (Daniel J D) [This message has been edited by Daniel J D (edited 07-12-2001).] |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
JD~ What a lovely thought you've carried through this piece. Enchantingly well done. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Ann Member
since 2000-07-07
Posts 64Australia |
this was a beautiful poem..........all the best, ~ANN~ |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
This is a truly vivid portrayal of beauty and hope, thank you, Daniel. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
very nice... I enjoyed |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
oh Daniel....this is outstanding. Love it very much. Charisma |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
You took the sad fact that 75% of this planet is covered in moisture and sculpted a hopeful conclusion. Enjoyed. |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
luffly!! simply luffly! I'd change the word 'knew' to 'know' in the 4th stanza, 2nd line, I think. |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Oh Daniel...what a loveky picture of hope you have painted here my friend |
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Daniel J D Senior Member
since 2000-10-01
Posts 1471Hillcrest, Queensland, Australia |
Marge, Anne, Kathleen, Cpat, Thank you all for the kind words, following the tears of our lives may be a very long journey, however, as I said in the end there is reality. Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love |
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Daniel J D Senior Member
since 2000-10-01
Posts 1471Hillcrest, Queensland, Australia |
Charisma, RS, Vas, and Paula, Likewise thank you. Vas thanks for the advice, I have changed the word. When following the tears take control. Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Awesome imagery in this one, Daniel. Very beautiful!!  All writing comes |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Such beautiful imagery was portrayed in this piece Daniel, I loved it. Take care.....Sue Suetang |
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