Open Poetry #15 |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
A reflective mood I was in that day you said I looked like I had lost my best friend, and at the exact moment that you said it I could feel the tears welling up again. I'm trying hard to let go of that pain I know I must put it in the past, I need to start making new memories ones I can treasure and that will last. Sometimes it is just so hard to forget those things that have caused me pain, and all to often I cry in this sorrow my tears fall down like steady rain. I do feel like I've lost my best friend and most days I don't know what to do, I just wish that you would realize that the best friend I've lost......is you. On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free. ~Me~ [This message has been edited by Gentle Spirit (edited 07-12-2001).] |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
I'm not sure I have a title to suggest... but I do like the poem a great deal.. very nicely written... |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
How about, "Like Steady Rain"? do you want any critique on mechanics? btw, I really like the poem, I was totally surprised at the last line which I'm positive was intended. Very well done!!!!Truly!!!! |
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Lighthousebob Member Elite
since 2000-06-14
Posts 4725California |
Maybe...... uh? something like....."Between Friends" because, I hope nothing comes between you.... -Bob |
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destiny502 Member
since 1999-11-23
Posts 57OH |
oh im no good at coming up with titles but i really like this and of course i can relate to the feeling of losing a best friend. its almost as if he doesnt care or even notice that our friendship is so different now. Love can sometimes be like magic, but magic can sometimes..just be illusion |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Gentle Spirit - a writing that says of your loss. I can suggest the following title, 'The Hurt Within'.... BC |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
I won't have a suggestion for a title, as that is NOT my strong point... ...I will just say that I was really touched by this write, GS...great work... sp it was love that first drew me, |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
how about just. . . "lost"?? well done GS. . . but sad. . . ----------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
Tossed around your lost and found |
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Sabriel.s.h.lover Member
since 2001-04-16
Posts 73b.f.e. aka- Hickville |
wow, i feel sad now. very sad poem. but good nonetheless. ~sabriel |
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