Open Poetry #15 |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989![]() |
A reflective mood I was in that day you said I looked like I had lost my best friend, and at the exact moment that you said it I could feel the tears welling up again. I'm trying hard to let go of that pain I know I must put it in the past, I need to start making new memories ones I can treasure and that will last. Sometimes it is just so hard to forget those things that have caused me pain, and all to often I cry in this sorrow my tears fall down like steady rain. I do feel like I've lost my best friend and most days I don't know what to do, I just wish that you would realize that the best friend I've lost......is you. On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free. ~Me~ [This message has been edited by Gentle Spirit (edited 07-12-2001).] |
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Cpat Hair![]()
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
I'm not sure I have a title to suggest... but I do like the poem a great deal.. very nicely written... |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
How about, "Like Steady Rain"? do you want any critique on mechanics? btw, I really like the poem, I was totally surprised at the last line which I'm positive was intended. Very well done!!!!Truly!!!! |
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Lighthousebob Member Elite
since 2000-06-14
Posts 4725California |
Maybe...... uh? something like....."Between Friends" because, I hope nothing comes between you.... -Bob |
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destiny502 Member
since 1999-11-23
Posts 57OH |
oh im no good at coming up with titles but i really like this and of course i can relate to the feeling of losing a best friend. its almost as if he doesnt care or even notice that our friendship is so different now. ![]() Love can sometimes be like magic, but magic can sometimes..just be illusion |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Gentle Spirit - a writing that says of your loss. I can suggest the following title, 'The Hurt Within'.... BC |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
I won't have a suggestion for a title, as that is NOT my strong point... ![]() sp ![]() it was love that first drew me, |
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Sven![]() ![]()
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
how about just. . . "lost"?? well done GS. . . but sad. . . ![]() ----------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
Tossed around your lost and found |
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Sabriel.s.h.lover Member
since 2001-04-16
Posts 73b.f.e. aka- Hickville |
wow, i feel sad now. very sad poem. but good nonetheless. ~sabriel |
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