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The Way the Moon Shows Off Your Eyes Why it is Just Paradise!
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The Way the Moon Shows Off Your Eyes Why it is Just Paradise! |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) 
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A single light endures the room Smoking fingers impending doom Weaved from webs upon the gloom The vilest beast has been exhumed His teeth are missing but a few His hair is long and unkempt too And everything is screaming you Better believe that he is true His collar’s high to block the glare You wonder if he’s debonair A bullet from your silverware Could only kill his savior faire He plucks his brow and shaves his chest He sucks his gut and does his best To eat the birds of vultures nest And smell to see if waters’, blessed The rental shop had one deluxe He kicks his way through all the mucks Festooned puddles he seldom ducks But, for this time to save his tux He comes on knocking and you implore “If you’ve no flowers leave from my door” You hear a curse and nothing more The rain begins to softly pour The night is fading the moon so full Chased the sun like maddened bull And you are torn from magic pull To place on head a cap of wool Your eyes sweep o’er with waking dreams The moon has left one final beam Then too it fades with cutting scream “Nothing is as once it seemed!” The menace dies and doorbell rings You hear a voice attached to kings Say that lilies make him sing “Your love is here my Lady Spring!” Lady Spring? You like the sound This man must know of what he’s found The peephole sets your heart to pound You swing the door to look around His tux is sharp, his hair is neat Your smile is huge and not discreet “Make my life be thus complete!” You shout and faint right off your feet You wake up in his bachelor pad His teeth are sharp, his eyes are sad His hair is long, his clothes are bad The smell is awful, I would add So don’t forget that monsters brew And make their dates on ICQ Even when the moon is new They will woo and marry you! [This message has been edited by wayoutwalt (edited 07-12-2001).] |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Oh walt sweetie, these poemtales you write are sooooooo cool ya know that huh and also I gotta say 'me' enjoyed reading this 2day... *~coco~* |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
What a scary tale...makes ya wonder who is on the other end of the uh oh |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
you two girls hehe I was just thinking on how I met my wife! |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
awww Walt  Btw u ever think about submitting a story to Stephen King yuh... ~*coco~* |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Walt~ How delightful ! What TomFoolery you used with the lovely title - to draw us in .... Now we G R I N !  ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Saxoness
since 1999-07-18
Posts 1102Texas |
love it Walt, I'm sure your wife will too!  "Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
You do wondrous tales of 'real life' events, ( cheeky grin here ). This flows delightfully well and is a wonderful, cautionary tale. The only thing that detracts, for a bit of space, is the 'silent scream.' It's used so much and isn't up to the freshness and originality of the remainder of your poem. Your poem's too good for it.  |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
I thank you all and VAS I am glad you can criticize for it is helpful. Let me take a look at that line |
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
You silly little poetry devil you! This was delightful!  |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
(chuckling) Nicely told Walt... I enjoyed the tale and the ending in particular |
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elisaseyes Member
since 1999-07-15
Posts 196fort worth texas |
There's a little bit of truth in here. |
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