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Cape Disappointment |
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RMW Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424 |
Cape Disappointment We do not usually equate The results of indiscretion With beauty. And yet, As the last of the spring freshets Make their appearance, And as the tide turns, bringing salt into the estuary, A melancholy light across the bay Wears the indecision Of a bare, mud flat Yielding to the ocean's influence. As if to cite the difficulty, It stares, but looks away Persistently, as would a woman Turning from the mirror To a memory. RMW [This message has been edited by RMW (edited 07-13-2001).] |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
Well Sir...you did it again. You elicited a sigh. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
A melancholy light across the bay Cannot decide concerning the indiscretion Of a bare, mud flat Yielding to the ocean's influence. As if to cite the difficulty, It stares, then looks away Persistently, as would a woman Searching in the mirror For a memory. doesn't get much better than this Bob... nicely said!!! As always.. I enjoyed! We do not often equate mud flats with beauty but in your hands, and with your eye you have shown us that looking beyond the obvious we can find more to contemplate |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
I like this I like this alot, great use of languages creating something a very soft melancholia "Here I am in prison,here I am with a ball and chain There is whiskey in the jar-o" Traditional irish song. |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Good write, Bob! The whole time I was reading it, though, I kept thinking of having been to Cape Disappointment. Have you? It's a lighthouse near the OR/WA border, black and white horizontal stripes. Now, I'm going to read your poem again and see if that question will stop invading my thoughts. Yep, I like the feel of this and the images presented. I know I'm missing the depth of it, though. I'd probably have to sit and chat with you at the mud flats themselves. psps: I'm back again after seeing Marge's comment, I was able to see the 'melancholy light' of your poem that was there all the time, but I think I must have been looking between the flashes and couldn't see it before. Now, I'm thinking you wrote this on site, after all. pspsps: Guess who needs to get a job so she won't persist in these one sided conversations with a person who's not all there, waiting for the person who needs to be here, but isn't cuz he has a job.  [This message has been edited by VAS (edited 07-12-2001).] |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
No disppointments here, Bob! As always, your work is layered with meaning. Cor |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Bob--You have a very unique poetic vision..I would like to see with it some time. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
RMW~ No 'disappointment' here ... Exquisite imagery ... 'It stares, then looks away Persistently, as would a woman Searching in the mirror For a memory.' I got an impression of a lighthouse lamp oscillating with the sweep of light~ I like the undercurrent of this one, very much. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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RMW Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424 |
Thank you all. Would like to add more but gotta run. Bob PS Marge...I was thinking of a lighthouse too. |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
o yuh! |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
When one is in love they always look more beautiful in the mirror...at least until tey look away...nice one..  ~Victoria~ |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Lovely write, RMW. As they say, the mirror never lies and holds many truths within. Enjoyed this! All writing comes |
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cpalmer Senior Member
since 2001-06-26
Posts 977Phoenix, Az |
I really enjoyed this...thank you Cindi God is our inspiration; Words of the heart can be music to our ears |
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