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Silent Night |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Silent Night This silence between us speaks volumes ... perhaps there's just nothing left to say. Another day goes unspoken ... as you seem to quietly slip further away. I sit here in the darkness of your void ... searching the horizon for your light. But dawn turns to dusk again ... day fades to another silent night. Why must I beg for your company ... perhaps it's a case of out of sight, out of mind? Maybe I'm the one to blame ... but I'm feeling the pain of left behind. I need you beside me to guide me ... I need you more than these words will ever say. I wont make it much longer without you ... God I pray you're not gone to stay. I know I've put you through hell again ... one too many times I made the wrong choice. For my sins I'm paying the ultimate price ... in atonement you punish me by taking my voice. Left alone to suffer in silence ... I cant breathe if I cant rhyme. Deaf, dumb, blind, and mute ... I feel like a handcuffed mime. On bended knee I plea ... give me back my poetry ... for without you my muse ... I simply cease to be. Janet Marie ~~~~~~~~~~~~ "I don't remember losing track of you You were always dancing in and out of view I must've always thought you'd be around Always keeping things real by playing the clown Now you're nowhere to be found" Jackson Browne ~~~~~~~~~~~~~ "Now the words had all been spoken And somehow the feeling still wasn't right And still we continued on through the night." "Now for me some words come easy But I know that they don't mean that much Compared with the things that are said when lovers touch You never knew what I loved in you I don't know what you loved in me Maybe the picture of somebody you were hoping I might be" ~Jackson Browne~  [This message has been edited by Janet Marie (edited 07-25-2001).] |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
Some poems take my breath away...this is one of them. I don't feel so quite alone as I did a moment ago. Thank you. |
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Voiceless Senior Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 686Under the stars upon the wind |
Really neat thanks for posting it. The flow worked really well, and made it easy and enjoyable to read. ~*Freedom Is Not Free*~ (Korean War Memorial) |
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Logan Senior Member
since 2001-05-28
Posts 1641Arkansas |
Ahhh, then I wipe a tear, for you are here, and it is not from the smoke, so I do..very gentle smile..your presence graces the room |
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ThUnDeRkYsS Senior Member
since 1999-09-23
Posts 727Wisconsin |
Liked where this went with all its building power...  EnjoyedStrive for higher levels, if they seem out of reach... Grow, and they will get closer. |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Janet Marie- WOW!! This is truly incredible!!! "Left alone to suffer in silence ... I cant breathe if I cant rhyme. Deaf, dumb, blind, and mute ... I feel like a handcuffed mime. On bended knee I plea ... give me back my poetry ... without you my muse ... I simply cease to be." Trust me, my friend...your muse isn't nearly as far away as you think. She's simply disguised herself as someone else to make you think she isn't there, but she let the cat out of the bag with this one.  AWESOME write, my friend!!  love and hugs, ~vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truely met the poet." -vlraynes [This message has been edited by vlraynes (edited 07-25-2001).] |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Jan? Sometimes it just wants to go in a different direction. I love you much and miss you more than much. Will be in touch soon. IN FACT, right now...smile... And you wrote this so eloquently, the anguish of the unexpressed feeling is poignantly apparent here. Love you, luv. |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Serenity has it, they are never really lost those skelliwags(sp) just wanting to go their own way. After a short power struggle they return, but are never quite the same! Janet Marie, I have been there and will be again, but know the pain that comes with it too and you spoke it well in this piece. Well done! ~ Give the heavens above more than just a passing glance ~And when you get the choice to sit it out or dance ~ I hope you dance. (Lee Ann Womack) |
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Ethan Halo Senior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 793on the roof again |
oh, don't i know the feeling. it hurts to even say their name, to know how far they are...but god, it's where the best poetry comes from. i don't know if you've got a spy cam on me, but i've been gone for months (for the reasons you've so vividly portrayed here) and still you know where i'm at. you make me want to write kindred one.... but like you've penned here... my muse is elsewhere. and for me...it hurts when she comes round. i love it when you hit the nail on the head. *and ya always do...  *the Bar is always open. the Time is always right. if god's lovin Word goes unspoken, the Music goes all night. [This message has been edited by Ethan Halo (edited 07-25-2001).] |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"I sit here in the darkness of your void ... searching the horizon for your light." "Left alone to suffer in silence ... I cant breathe if I cant rhyme. Deaf, dumb, blind, and mute ... I feel like a handcuffed mime." What a wonderful twist you've placed in this context JM ... the human aspects you've captured at the distancing of a loved one, was brought beautifully into focus through the surprise I found when discovered you were addressing your muse. Oh my dear, she has definately not deserted you my friend ... this was beautifully written. I really enjoyed this lovely piece. Please tell her that for me will you? . Best wishes, /Kit |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
I too wondered who the jerk was who caused such anguish. Glad it was one whose neck I can't get in trouble for wringing. "Oh what a tangled web we weave when first we practice to decieve" |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
JM, Everything that goals within our souls Only brings us to a final whole. Love Ya |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Girlie...you are poetry...look through my eyes and see the beauty in your soul listen through my ears and hear your song It's there in every beat of your heart... you just need to see the reason to weave it all again...the wings of a butterfly beat within your chest....now let them fly~ Love you~ |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I see your muse creeping back in, hiding behind doorways, in the ink well, sneaking through the pen's cap.... now go find a quiet spot and let her do the talking for a little while - I think she's about ready to explode! |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Janet, the ache behind the words is powerful....the want so clear.....I hope your muse returns to you. Although, it looks like it never went away.....you have magic in your pen sweet butterfly |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Janet Marie--I know your muse is still around for it captures me every time I see your name and reminds me...just listen to yourself. Wonderful poem, sweets!! |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Wow - Janet you express your desire to find your muse so powerfully and intensely. But, truly, in my eyes your muse could never be lost or diminished. You're a gifted artist of words, my friend And you proved this with your awesome poem.This one's for the library, butterfly poetess~ Melissa~ |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Janet no need to beg...love and poetry come to you on their own accord...James |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
jan, this was so sad & touching. you are such a gifted writer, and even when your muse is "missing" your work still touches many hearts. look around this place at how many folks you have touched. your words are there, they are just underneath all that's going on. your muse hasn't left you. she is hurt like you say, probably. now that ive rambled on and prob made a fool outta myself...just wanted to say great piece and nice seeing you. love you. me "but i see your true colors, |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
I think I know a cure to this curse of yours in not being able to find your muse when you really need her. So guess what??!!?? Yeppers, CHALLENGE TIME!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Start from this and see where you can take it. As I stumbled onto the pathway of your gaze I found myself spellbound within love's maze Illuminated jewels of mesmerizing pleasure Guiding my heart towards a heavenly treasure ................ Now it is your turn o' sweet puddle puff of unleashed abandonment. By the way. I DID like the way you poured your heart out in the poetic plea for return of that playful muse of yours. It flows across the soul just as much as one of your butterfly verses. Nice try but I ain't buying it. Oh, and did I mention that you have until tomorrow to write the next verse the this gift I left you?  |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Now this is a poem with a switch in direction I loved it! Very well done You have a twisty muse Who likes to confuse Liz |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
'I sit here in the darkness of your void ... searching the horizon for your light. But dawn turns to dusk again ... day fades to another silent night. Why must I beg for your company ... perhaps it's a case of out of sight, out of mind? Maybe I'm the one to blame ... but I'm feeling the pain of left behind.' Well, J...I think she's given you quite a gift today...these are some very cool verses! Excellent classic JM emotion expressed in this one, for sure! Love it, m'friend...  k  it was love that first drew me, |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
JanetMarie~ Cleverly done .... don't think we're buying that you thunk it up on your own, do you ??? Nah ... that little muse wrote this one and here you are trying to report her missing. Now, you fess up, ya' heah ? Very, very clever, sweet poetess ! Hi Mark~   Knew you wouldn't mind that ! Love n' hugs n' kisses~ ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Thank you always seems to little to say to you all for these wonderful, replies and compliments...and your encouragement and support is priceless and treasured. I realize my muse is in some sort of transition and perhaps taking a new direction, or perhaps taking a break from me. I can wear anyone out *L* And yes my dear fellow poets I do realize me muse is around if I am able to write this, but the frustration of the long lulls in between the poems and the fact that I cant write out what ever is locked inside is what needs expressing the most. I know its all part of the territory if we are going to call ourselves writers. THANK YOU ALL for putting up with me and my moody muse and Mark...thank you so much for that beautiful verse...BUT that verse is too pretty to give away...So Im going to give it back to you so you can work your magic on it...and HEY how about posting a poem!!! Im not above begging *L* Post a poem cowboy...or I wont send anymore HOT CHIPS  LOLTHANK YOU Poetry Land love to all jm only you could give love that satisfies the soul... |
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Rick Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 2903Victoria, Australia |
Dear Janet Marie, I thought it was about a relationship of a couple (in the human sense), very well done, writer's block hits us all, just keep thinking, trying, and write everything down, much will come to a poet like yourself to produce flow and rhythm. Great work. Rick |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Reading this intensely beautiful outpour of art leads me to believe that it is not your Muse whom you seek, JM... Perhaps this is a completely subjective statement, and obviously I know nothing of your personal life, but from personal experience, I would venture to say that what you seek is... Love. This, is the ambrosial food of eternity which seductively feeds the muse one delicious inspiration-filled grape at a time... Know, at least, that we all love you here... -MVS "When you tell the Truth, you never have to remember what you just said." |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
Excellent! One of your best Janet, in my humble opinion. "Friends are quiet angels who lift us to our |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Rick, Mark and Eagle... thank you so much for your kind replies and encouragement. thanks to all in poetry land jm |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
On bended knee I plea ... give me back my poetry ... for without you my muse ... I simply cease to be." YES YES YES!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! " I walked beside the evening sea And dreamed a dream that could not be" George William Curtis" |
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