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Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

0 posted 2001-07-24 09:18 AM

In this space
Between the letters
And lines
Lies as much
As is penned.

I read slowly
Savoring the words
As they dripped
Out of my mouth
And slid down
My chin

To see them
Sopped up
By the spaces
And new ones form
From their dying

In this space,

This one...

I tasted you
And relished
The stains
left

between

the letters

and lines

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

1 posted 2001-07-24 09:19 AM

DARN this is good!

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

2 posted 2001-07-24 09:20 AM

my goodness Ron......you are touching my heart this morning!!

Tiersdin
Member Elite

since 2000-11-17

Posts 2364
east coast

3 posted 2001-07-24 09:52 AM

WOW!

*melts*

T
i
e
r
~~~

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

4 posted 2001-07-24 09:58 AM

Sunshine: Thanks so much... you do always say the nicest things

SEA: To have touched the heart of one... is to have touched the essence of all love...
Thanks for the comment!

RT... Yeah I know you use a different name...but I can spell RT..( smiling) Nice to see you this morning and if you want to melt...all you have to do here is go outside.
Thanks for the comment!!

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

5 posted 2001-07-24 10:05 AM

this is a fantastic piece
involving so many of the senses
the 6th one, as well, I think

and I have to tell you
as I read the words dripping down your chin
I was eating the best canteloupe
of the summer
and I so needed the sopping of the spaces

you enhanced even the joy of it

I hope you don't mind
adding this sense to your luscious poem
scrumptious indeed

love your comment to Tiersden, RT tee hee

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

6 posted 2001-07-24 10:15 AM

Thanks VAS.. appreciate the image of eating the cantelope... and in manyways..the spaces and the words are like ripe fruit...to be savored in season..

RSWells
Member Elite

since 2001-06-17

Posts 2533

7 posted 2001-07-24 10:36 AM

A caloric cascade of contemplation. Enjoyed.

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

8 posted 2001-07-24 10:58 AM

(chuckling) Thanks RS.. hope not too caloric so that it was sachrine... I appreciate the comment!

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

9 posted 2001-07-24 12:18 PM

Cpat...I have looked between words and under lines before, but never saw such juice. Loved the thought of this!

jellybeans
Member Elite

since 2000-10-13

Posts 2298

10 posted 2001-07-24 02:05 PM

wow........this leaves me speechless.....this is good..........really good *nods her head* and I know good when I see it

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