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walker Member Elite
since 2001-02-11
Posts 2240Florida |
The dense air doesn't let me breathe It doesn't affect you you are immune to it If only it was so easy to let you go If only I could be so strong But instead I've learned to live with this poison air which kills slowly. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
This is a harsh, stark piece...I hope you are writing this from the outside looking in, and not the opposite... |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
oh yes.....there have been many if only's, but there is also a cure, when the poison air is blown away by the sweet fresh breeze of a new love... The 'if only's' will vanish.... and this was a thought provoking write, my friend!! The road goes on forever, and the stories never end... |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
Breathing is pretty important...perhaps a decision is called for. Sorry, that wasn't advice, not from me. Ha! Good one, walker. |
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ThUnDeRkYsS Senior Member
since 1999-09-23
Posts 727Wisconsin |
So hard this stuff can be, stick in there and the air gets nicer  Strive for higher levels, if they seem out of reach... Grow, and they will get closer. |
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Ethan Halo Senior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 793on the roof again |
i know it sounds like a load, but you keep hangin and you'll feel better. you just gotta get out there and find a new beautiful baby.  stark, but ....intriguing read. i like it. it has a hook on it. the Bar is always open. |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Excellent descriptive piece Walker ... the mood you've captured weighs heavy and compliments your phrasing well, nicely written!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoy |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
oh, my! Sometimes we do learn to endure that which is caustic to us because of "the something else" it provides. |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Take your mouth off the tailpipe Starkly, darkly, hopelessly written. I pray from an upset muse and not life. Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. Philip Sidney (1554-1586) Loving in Truth |
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thecraig Member
since 2001-03-11
Posts 223 |
Flowers ?????????????????????????  |
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