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A personal fear
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A personal fear |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee 
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I ramble through the confines Of the forgotten, lost, and rusty Searching... getting off track Forgetting...what is it I'm looking for? Focus!.. Oh Yeah...words silly! I imagine a slumped over and ragged Woman dragging her feet Across dusty, squeaking boards Haggard and absent minded Grey strings fluidly falling From her head. She stands in silent ponder Desperately searching her soul For what she came into the room for Wide eyed and trancing A statue of lost mind. Cracking, she begins to cry Tears traveling acoss the wrinkles Stinging to new moisture Her lips quiver speechless. The only sound she hears is breath The only thing she feels is beating Her heart trying gravely To rush blood to cold hands and feet. She cries the surrendered cry The realization of age The forlorn waking of the closely departed She breaths But can't remember why. So I write, even when I can't think It will come to me, in between the visits of the numb, just so I'll have something to remember myself by. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
rwood, A palette of simpatico. Well done. |
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shadow974 Senior Member
since 2001-06-21
Posts 636Michigan |
excelent poem, the imagery is wonderful. Do not fear going forward slowly, |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
Seymour: Thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed it! Shadow: Kind words! My imagery is a bit darker here than usual. Thanks! Sincerely, Rwood |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Not a pretty picture of old age, to be sure, but a very vivid one! -MVS "When you tell the Truth, you never have to remember what you just said." |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
There is a feeling of sadness I take from this poem. As I get older I become more understanding and compassionate. This poem touched me in is beauty. Love I leave with you my friend whether it be in your life or of yet the essense of your dreams. |
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Rick Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 2903Victoria, Australia |
To leave something of ourselves, is a gift to life and to our memories. Don't worry about the words that do not come, what I read is terrific, you told a story that we could all see very clearly, don't stop the writing and the wanting, keep the pen upright and working, keep us all reading you lovely work. Great work. Rick |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
Mark, Startime, & Rick: Thanks so much for reading. True so vivid if we are awake. The fear is losing the memories through no fault, just age. So uncontrollable. Painfully it comes. Thank you for your encouragement Rick. I need it always. I shall keep the words coming! And read, read, read some more of these pages which we post.  Sincerely, Regina |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
great specific imagery here, that's refreshing and rare! Thank you for this. " I walked beside the evening sea And dreamed a dream that could not be" George William Curtis" |
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ThUnDeRkYsS Senior Member
since 1999-09-23
Posts 727Wisconsin |
Very good imagery, painted a vivid mental picture of the setting of this. Very nice job. Strive for higher levels, if they seem out of reach... Grow, and they will get closer. |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
what an amazing final stanza...those words, especially, shot right out at me well done piece! |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Regina, How can such youth write so knowingly of such age? I loved this. (I haven't stopped my quest) |
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Apachecat906 Member
since 2001-09-04
Posts 217Michigan, USA |
Wow Regina this was awesome, and kinda scary; I also fear getting old and losing control of my mind and body. I can't pick a favorite line, they are all so strong. I loved the last stanza. Good job. I hope your doing well. (on a personal note: if you remember some of the things we talked about, I just wanted to let you know my baby is due Feb. 25th) Take care! [This message has been edited by Apachecat906 (01-07-2002 09:37 AM).] |
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