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Lady In White

Member Elite

since 2001-02-12

Posts 2799
USA

0 posted 2001-07-20 09:43 PM

A moment’s life

this
I have lived
with you

if this is
all I have,

then

it was ours

yours ~
mine ~

us

~*~

perhaps I should
stop now

for what more
could be said

you gave me this
glance ~

this touch

this…

real

how could I not wrap
up tomorrow
into yesterday
today

how could I not
say

thank you

you were but a
moment’s brevity

a bit of breath

a thought of wind

unwinding in my mind

you came and left

a wink

in time

and I wonder if you
were real

yes

you must have been…

I still smell you…

on the wind

and your embrace still
takes up my
face

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

1 posted 2001-07-20 10:27 PM

Lady In White-
   This is wonderful!

        "you gave me this
        glance ~

        this touch

        this

        real

        how could I not wrap
        up tomorrow
        into yesterday
        today"

   WOW...I love it..

   hugs,
   ~vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his
heart, you have not truely met the poet."
-vlraynes

deleeme
Senior Member

since 1999-10-09

Posts 1766
NEW ENGLAND, USA

2 posted 2001-07-20 10:39 PM

Illusive moments of Love, which should last forever- but sometimes disappear as quickly as they arrive. How nicely you expressed the feel of such.
David

Every Day's a Blessing
And Gift-Wrapped from Above,
Share it with another
And Spread the Father's Love!!!

May You come to Know His Best Blessing

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

3 posted 2001-07-21 01:22 AM

you were but a
moment’s brevity

a bit of breath

a thought of wind

unwinding in my mind

you came and left

a wink

in time
=======================

never underestimate the power of a *winkie* *L*

(sorry, couldnt resist)

this is lovely in its longing and passionate plea. Sometimes a brief breeze can be the wind beneath our wings for as long as we need it to be.
And sometimes things come back to us on a second wind
see how you get me thinking poetess LW
jm

only you could give love that satisfies the soul...
see the darkness of my heart and still won't let me go.

JLR
Senior Member

since 2001-02-04

Posts 1785

4 posted 2001-07-21 01:26 AM

Understand...the moment written well!

Logan
Senior Member

since 2001-05-28

Posts 1641
Arkansas

5 posted 2001-07-21 01:26 AM

Ahh, Lady, gentle smile, a moment can be a lifetime under the right circumstances. Very well done

Denise

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 1999-08-22

Posts 22648

6 posted 2001-07-22 10:40 PM

This is lovely. Very beautifully expressed!

ThUnDeRkYsS
Senior Member

since 1999-09-23

Posts 727
Wisconsin

7 posted 2001-07-23 01:13 AM

Very well expressed indeed, I like the different structure to this as well.

Strive for higher levels, if they seem out of reach... Grow, and they will get closer.

Lady In White

Member Elite

since 2001-02-12

Posts 2799
USA

8 posted 2001-07-24 03:03 PM

This is so lovely to read, all of these responses....thank you so very much....

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