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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
 This cold freezes my soul...all I'd need is a smile. This tempest blows me away....it'd take but a calming look. I could never be free...I'll never stand alone-- For you have succeeded at stealing my heart. You're the one...I've been stricken. I was established...then you came into view. I could always focus...I can no longer take my mind off of you. It's love, it's adulation...call it what you will--I'm mesmerized. If there's somebody to save me from this wrong, If there's somebody to warm my heart again...it's you. There's a line in between...I can't make it out-- Sail above the incomprehensible to translate for me. I guess it's been a while...perhaps it hasn't. Nonetheless, I can no longer find reason to refrain. Set me free...all it'd take is your touch. Ease this ache...I'll need but a sincere indication. (Dear love, I'd need just a glimpse.) -kh '00 (this is a revised repost of one of my early works...  )it was love that first drew me, |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is lovely, Kris! Very nice! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I could always focus...I can no longer take my mind off of you. It's love, it's adulation...call it what you will--I'm mesmerized. If there's somebody to save me from this wrong, If there's somebody to warm my heart again...it's you. There's a line in between...I can't make it out-- Sail above the incomprehensible to translate for me. I guess it's been a while...perhaps it hasn't. Nonetheless, I can no longer find reason to refrain. Set me free...all it'd take is your touch. Ease this ache...I'll need but a sincere indication. (Dear love, I'd need just a glimpse.) ============================ Yowzers...such anticipation...like a poetic sugar rush  Love the vocab in this...and of course the(...)  wonderful outburst of emotion and devotion. way cool write poetess blizzardbooty  only you could give love that satisfies the soul... |
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MyEnchanted_Melody Senior Member
since 2001-05-30
Posts 1106across the land of dreams. In your heart, I'd always be. |
I can no longer find reason to refrain. Set me free...all it'd take is your touch. Ease this ache...I'll need but a sincere indication. (Dear love, I'd need just a glimpse.) ======================== A nice piece of longing and love I liked the last few lines in particular... Thank you ********************* It's only me.......only me |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Sometimes all it takes is one look into the right eyes....very lovely |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
so I've noticed. . . this is wonderful. . . I like the changes that you've made. . .  ----------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Then I would say " Stumbling into the pathway of your gaze, could take me prisoner anyday". What a beautiful expression and done so in the typical "snorepants" (oops, I mean "snowpants) style and use of the English language. Did I give too much away???? Loved it my sweet friend. |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
you always deliver and this is no exception. I enjoyed every word and that picture is stunning! " I walked beside the evening sea And dreamed a dream that could not be" George William Curtis" |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
Such a beautiful and entreating plea, Kris, who could resist? *smiles* ~Tier |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
Denise: thank you...great to see you! J: hehe...I like that...poetic sugar rush...never thought of that...it's so true, though...like a panic sort of thing...ok, I'll stop... ...very cool sig, btw... ...thanks, girlie!!MEM: thanks so much...glad you liked it! it is a pleasure and privilege to share my writing, anyway! Paula: yep, indeed...this is true...thank you for reading! Sven: thanks...I am glad you liked it too! M: hey there, you...I can't tell you what a pleasure it is to see your name on my posts again... ...and, HEY...that wasn't snoring... ...besides, if you'd let me sleep, I wouldn't have to sleep so soundly...BUT, ANYway...thank you, my friend...great to see ya! Kathleen: well, thank you, my friend, for your very kind comments...I appreciate your faithful replies!  Tier: thanks, my friend, for your reply...I am glad you liked this! sp  it was love that first drew me, |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoy |
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ThUnDeRkYsS Senior Member
since 1999-09-23
Posts 727Wisconsin |
I like this, touches a hidden place of mine that gets dug out every once in a while lol Enjoyed much!Strive for higher levels, if they seem out of reach... Grow, and they will get closer. |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
vandana: thanks! glad you enjoyed! thunderkyss: thank you...I am glad you got something out of it! sp it was love that first drew me, |
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