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Oh, This Summer Day
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Oh, This Summer Day |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Oh, This Summer Day Virginia Salter rumble grumble sound waves tumble nagging me to work airplanes up mowers down dustmen running all ‘round town breeze is fanning summer air you’d think I’d surely be out there getting licks in very early while the sky’s not feeling surly oh, awright I’ll get off my duff come away though awf’ly tough © July 18, 2001 |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
I really liked the cadence and rhyme with this visual piece -- especially the opening lines. A fun read with thoughts on daily life worth living... -MVS "When you tell the Truth, you never have to remember what you just said." |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Yes.. nice use of sound and cadence to convey the day... I liked this VAS |
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SmittenKitten Senior Member
since 2001-06-20
Posts 1131where the sky and horizon meet |
hehe, somedays it is hard to get going! You have captured those days perfectly with this poem  Great write! ~Krista "Poetry and Hums aren't things which you get, they're things which get you. And all you can do is to go where they can find you." ~Winnie the Pooh [This message has been edited by SmittenKitten (edited 07-19-2001).] |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
heh heh heh thank you all, it's always hard to get going when it's yard work versus computer play, composition, communication. But, I like yard work better than house work, at least in the summer. |
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