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GhostWriter_6
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since 2001-09-03

Posts 237
??Amityville??

0 posted 2001-09-14 11:25 AM

Low Level Serotonin

What could possibly fill this void?
A black hole of empty space in my brain,
A dark star that has no illumination,
That goes undetected by astrologer’s telescopes.
Naked eyes couldn’t possibly see inside my skin.....
To witness the downward spiral as it begins to spin.
An eclectic brain full of depressing images,
Casting shadows on brighter days,
Even the shadows at night seem a darker shade of gray.
Nothingness..................
Depression darkens my perception,
Candles burn black flames
Paper dimmed by tearstains.
Disconnection from the world only to be placed in limbo.....
An undefined location.. No interpretations for the emotion.
Being buried beneath mental debris,
Pinned down by grief... realize time is the only relief

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

1 posted 2001-09-14 11:29 AM

This is an excellent beginning to see how the world's events are affecting us all - I especially liked the line "candles burn black flames"...

Very good, young man!

Charisma

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since 2000-09-30

Posts 5906
lost in blue pages

2 posted 2001-09-14 02:54 PM

straith from the heart....well done!

Charisma

doreen peri
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since 1999-05-25

Posts 3812
Virginia

3 posted 2001-09-14 03:09 PM

i'm trying to realize time will be the relief...

thank you for this... you wrote it well

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

4 posted 2001-09-14 03:41 PM

Ghost,
Depression darkens my perception,
Candles burn black flames
Paper dimmed by tearstains.
A very good write. Enjoyed

LngJhnAg
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since 1999-07-23

Posts 3508
Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion

5 posted 2001-09-14 04:02 PM

way to go, Ghost - You wrote this very well.

Personally, I'm going to start smiling again even if it doesn't sink in right away. And, little by little, I'm going to take back what belongs to me and what they tried to steal.

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

6 posted 2001-09-14 06:26 PM

Outstanding! I am keeping this one! wow, very well done!

"It's true/the way I feel
was promised by your face
the sound of your voice
painted on my memories
even if you're not with me
I'm with you"
~LP~

GhostWriter_6
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since 2001-09-03

Posts 237
??Amityville??

7 posted 2001-09-14 09:58 PM

what can i say.. i didnt think i would even get one response from this poem seeing as how i wrote it in the middle of one of my depression states..but im glad you liked it

GhostWriter_6

Domzi
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since 2001-09-08

Posts 288
New York (BK)

8 posted 2001-09-14 11:49 PM

You have me thinking of brighter days my man.

As my borough has always stated- Do or Die.

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