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Amature2
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0 posted 2001-09-07 11:38 AM


                         A little of me
                My heart, loyalty, respect
                     All from me to you

[This message has been edited by Amature2 (edited 09-07-2001).]

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Titia Geertman
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1 posted 2001-09-07 12:36 PM


That's a very good senryu you wrote there.

But one hint: place them in the center, they will look nicer even, like this:

A little of me
My heart, loyalty, respect
All from me to you


Keep them coming Amature2

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wayoutwalt
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2 posted 2001-09-07 12:37 PM


Why not take all of me all of meeeeee

nice one indeed

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3 posted 2001-09-07 12:44 PM


understated yet powerful...good stuff
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4 posted 2001-09-07 12:57 PM


very nice   I like this  

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5 posted 2001-09-08 10:01 AM


Wow! To think that those major attributes, wonderful attributes would be only a 'little of' you. What a wonderful gift to give that special person in your life.
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