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Drowning
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Drowning |
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RSEvans Senior Member
since 1999-10-23
Posts 1147Tulsa, OK, USA 
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Blue-green water sweeps me down Swirling bubbles all around I gasp...I cough...I choke and then I'm pulled back under yet again. The dream's the same night after night A horrid tale and full of fright It's just a dream and yet I know It has the power to frighten me so. I reach for you and you're not there I can't carress your silken hair I cannot hear you softly breathe Cannot hear you quietly dream. I'm drowning inside cause you're not here It fills me with the same horrid fear As the drowning dream I spoke about The painful longing, sorrow and doubt. Without you I'm dying, can't you see? You are my lifeguard, rescue me! [This message has been edited by RSEvans (edited 09-05-2001).] |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
RSEvans, A delightful read. Enjoyed |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
oh, I liked this very much.  |
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NightShadow Member
since 2001-09-04
Posts 127New Jersey |
Very nice poem.. Wish I was a lifeguard..  |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Leaves the reader with a sense of fear, yet great longing...very good write. ~Time has cast a spell on you |
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RSEvans Senior Member
since 1999-10-23
Posts 1147Tulsa, OK, USA |
ST Thanks SEA glad you liked it Night you are MY Baywatch Babe Enchant thanks again for another wonderful comment |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
Ahh what the subconscious mind can do. She needs to throw you a floatie and let you drift a while in sweetness. Enjoyed very much.Sincerely, Regina |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
How well done. I enjoyed it very much If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Oh my, yes, what a scary nightmare, and to feel like that without the one you love, yes, it is akin to drowning. I like the ending, made it seem lighter somehow. Excellent poem. Sandra |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
Beautiful expressed, love it a lot!! Charisma |
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cruz Member
since 2000-07-18
Posts 282Dallas,Texas USA |
some great words here! flows rather smooth. nice write. |
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