Open Poetry #15 |
The Second Time |
Martie
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Posts 28049California |
The Second Time The second time, she followed him. She left father knows best for the grassy hills of university idealism. It was the sixties after all and love was free. It was like plunging from a diving board into the ocean, and he of soft brown eyes and poetry had already disappeared into the paperback books, madras skirts and coffee houses of intellectual pleasure. Once in a while they would ride on his scooter out of the crowded corridors to the hills where the bell tower’s song was less formidable and watch the fog creep across the bay. Sometimes he would take her home to his one room with the mattress on the floor. He studied, while she memorized the colors of the fabric on his shirt, considered the glaze of his skin against the twilight desk lamp, and watched the dark curls against his neck caress his skin. He stroked the printed paper then turned to her. She loved him with the purity of youthful madness, he responded to the silken moment and melted into her with the carelessness of his arching back. The rest is another story. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
God I am breathless with the beauty of the sensuousness of this piece. What no sequel? "She loved him with the purity of youthful madness, he responded to the silken moment and melted into her with the carelessness of his arching back. The rest is another story." Now this other story will it be published soon? Curious ethome Excellent poetry Martie! Took me back to those years and the thinking that prevailed then! |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
Sounds like such a heartfelt memory. Lovely story. I'm waiting for the sequel Tracey If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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Voiceless Senior Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 686Under the stars upon the wind |
Great, another great example of the great things in life.. So now about this other story.. Freedom is not Free (Korean War memorial) |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
"He responded to the silken moment." Like the mood you have created here...James |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Oh Martie~ Oh ... Oh ... I like this~ You just have that special quality about your memories that brings them into sharp focus for the reader. Martiesque at it's best ! ! *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Ah, the storied series of life...looking forward to the next. But you knew that.... |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Martie- Wow! This is awesome! I'm liking this bunches!! You have such a way with words and imagery... I was 'watching' this unfold... You amaze me! Hugs, ~vicky "...until you have read the verse on his |
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ramrog Member
since 2001-08-22
Posts 50 |
wonderful. I am touched. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
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He studied, while she memorized the colors of the fabric on his shirt, considered the glaze of his skin against the twilight desk lamp, and watched the dark curls against his neck caress his skin. He stroked the printed paper then turned to her. She loved him with the purity of youthful madness, he responded to the silken moment and melted into her with the carelessness of his arching back. ============================== OH MAN.... yes...MORE MORE MORE.... take it to Prose and take us along... Encore my dear... A man who asks a woman to lie for him, is a man who will lie to that woman. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Oh do I have a memory identical to this one, psst - let's compare sequels? he he - Martie, this was woven beautifully, I loved it. *~If you can't say anything nice about someone, don't say anything at all*~ |
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