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The Rusty Knight
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since 2001-08-29

Posts 414
Texas

0 posted 2001-09-02 01:32 AM

    dreams... of the night

  close her eyes with your thoughts
  take her breath away with your words
  she dances in your arms and your dreams
  slip your hands around her waist
  hold her close
  she moves and you feel her breath on your neck
  soft music swirling her gossamer gown
  shimmering as emeralds on fire
  her eyes look but see nothing but the moment
  delicate motions of her hair
  stir the beat of your heart
  hovering near and yet so far
  feeling the rhythm of two hearts
  the rhythm of the very universe
  two hearts entwine as one spirit
  she takes flight in your arms
  she whispers and you close your eyes
  this dream and the night go on forever

RdanJ 2000

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

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Florida's Foreverly Shores

1 posted 2001-09-02 01:44 AM

Dan~
This is very lovely~
Welcome to Passions !
You'll enjoy the poets and friendships here ~
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

2 posted 2001-09-02 01:54 AM

There is nothing "rusty" about this poem. It's fresh and beautiful, and my feet were dancing. I really liked the "gossamer gown shimmering as emeralds on fire".

Tracey
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since 2001-08-29

Posts 2808
where insanity meets breeding

3 posted 2001-09-02 01:58 AM

Very pretty picture painted

Tracey

If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please?

The Rusty Knight
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since 2001-08-29

Posts 414
Texas

4 posted 2001-09-02 02:02 AM

Thank you all I am new here and amazed at the speed of the comments.*S* Emerald green seems to be a thread that is in several of the pieces I have written as dreams are in most of them...Thanks again

[This message has been edited by The Rusty Knight (edited 09-03-2001).]

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

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5 posted 2001-09-02 02:02 AM

More than lovely...more like you read my mind! Now pardon me, while I go spin in circles...totally giddy...welcome to Passions!

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

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Listening to every heart

6 posted 2001-09-02 08:20 AM

You've danced this across our pages very well...so Welcome to Passions! Please check your e-mail for a special greeting!

Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...
I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound.
KRJ

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

7 posted 2001-09-02 09:17 AM

Simply magical! Welcome to Passions. Ahh, now I can dance through my days and my dreams. Where did I put my emerald gown...
Looking forward to more from you!
Nancy Lee *S*

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
Dancing with you in the summer rain~

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

8 posted 2001-09-02 11:37 AM

Welcome

dreams like this are so wonderful

very nicely done

~SEA

BloomingRose
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since 2000-08-09

Posts 3092
Florida

9 posted 2001-09-02 01:15 PM

WELCOME TO PASSION'S

A very lovely poem, and a great first post!

I think you will enjoy Passion's. There are a lot of nice people here.

Deb

Nightshade

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since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

10 posted 2001-09-02 01:52 PM

Rusty - If your dance card isn't too full, could I please have a turn around the floor with you? Just lovely.

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

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California

11 posted 2001-09-02 04:53 PM

Rusty--You dream sweet and tell lovely. Welcome to Passions!

Zinsser
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since 2001-02-27

Posts 1641
Calif.

12 posted 2001-09-02 04:59 PM

I like this very much.......

Thank You
~~~Connie~~~

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

13 posted 2001-09-02 05:45 PM

Very nice...James

Voiceless
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since 2001-02-19

Posts 686
Under the stars upon the wind

14 posted 2001-09-02 06:52 PM

Very nice!
I can't wait to read more!

Freedom is not Free (Korean War memorial)

ethome
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since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

15 posted 2001-09-02 06:56 PM

A very sensuous and passionate piece! It flows with the magic of love!

vandana

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since 1999-10-22

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USA

16 posted 2001-09-02 08:25 PM

enjoy

Victoria

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since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

17 posted 2001-09-02 08:45 PM

Welcome to Passions ..im sure you will enjoy the company...

~Victoria~

Every child is an artist. The challenge is to remain an artist once he grows up.

Pablo Picasso

Janet Marie
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18 posted 2001-09-02 10:39 PM

close her eyes with your thoughts
take her breath away with your words
===================================

and isnt that the true beauty of poetry...
and I do believe you've accomplished this
with this passionate, romantic write.
Very well done poet sir...wonderful imagery and flow.
Please add my welcome to the list...
so nice to have you with us in Poetry Land

I look forward to reading more of your work RK.
jm

A man who asks a woman to lie for him, is a man who will lie to that woman.
A woman who lies for a man, is a woman who lies to herself.
(vise versa)

Suetang
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since 2001-03-07

Posts 5187
Melbourne, Australia

19 posted 2001-09-02 10:42 PM

What a wonderful first post you have given us. You words captured the pure essence of romance and love and I felt myself being swept away through your words. I look forward to reading more of your beautiful work. Take care and welcome..........Sue

Suetang

Trillium

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since 2001-03-09

Posts 12098
Idaho, USA

20 posted 2001-09-02 10:43 PM

Romantic and lovely! Welcome to Passions and hope you enjoy your time here.

Betty Lou Hebert

Gentle Spirit
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since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

21 posted 2001-09-03 11:29 AM

Beautiful writing Dan, I look forward to sharing more of your words. Welcome to passions.

On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free.
~Me~

(I could have missed the pain, but I'd have had to miss the dance~Garth)

ggrn3
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since 2000-08-17

Posts 433
Nahunta Georgia U.S.

22 posted 2001-09-03 03:04 PM

Rusty

I've always dreamed of writing something that would have all the ladies here at Passions cheering and dreaming. You've accomplished this feat. It seems like your a "knight in shining armor." I hope your image never tarnishes. Good writing. Welcome to Passions.

Garfield

VAS
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since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

23 posted 2001-09-03 05:30 PM

I like it a lot, good images...the only thing I wonder about, is if it might be more attention-grabbing if heart/hearts were not used so often in such proximity. Of course, since it's a short piece you can't get them far apart, therefore, are there some synonyms that would work, you think?

catalinamoon

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since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

24 posted 2001-09-03 05:45 PM

Hi, a bit late in my welcome, but I must have missed this before..Funny thing, I wrote a poem in my early passions days, called Rusted Knight..LOL
Sounds like you are a lot more romantic than he, if this post is any indication. Very nice and flowing. Makes me want to dance.
Sandra

The Rusty Knight
Member

since 2001-08-29

Posts 414
Texas

25 posted 2001-09-03 08:18 PM

Vas,
You are right, thanks...I have worked on that area before and have not got the exact words to it yet. I am very aware of areas in my prose that repeat too close together,but had not see the forest for the trees on this. Thanks again

Thanks to all of you for your comments. We put a part of ourselves on the line when we share something like this and I am humbled by the response. Thank you

Death comes not when we cease to breath, but when we cease to dream.

Trew
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since 2000-06-10

Posts 365
Ottawa, Canada

26 posted 2001-09-04 12:02 PM

Beautifully written! A very romantic picture, indeed.
Welcome (if a little late!) to the forums.

Trev.

NightShadow
Member

since 2001-09-04

Posts 127
New Jersey

27 posted 2001-09-04 08:45 PM

Very nice poem, sweet, and wonderful.. makes me think of a couple of dreams Ive had.

Welcome here, as I am new as well, hope to see more of your wonderful poems

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