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...Etchings...
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...Etchings... |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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Etchings tapped keys behold tenacious thoughts quick to be deleted in bits and bytes removal of same from monitored I’s that know better than to reveal so much too soon truth pen in hand script’s recall of penmanship taught curls to lines to curls encircling round white memories laden with burdens of permanence, not so easily deleted, even when held to flames before one’s eyes in its reality when one can feel between one’s finger the soul that made them become, made more memorable than what is seen now… truth be told only when it is written on the heart does permanence remain…. write me… etch for me some remembrance that seeds sown will bear to nourish your soul even if no linen of lines curled to round lay between fingertips beholding only bits and bytes of tenacious ideals captured only if one knows how to turn it on… |
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Voiceless Senior Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 686Under the stars upon the wind |
This is so interesting... You have to read it twice! Freedom is not Free (Korean War memorial) |
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Logan Senior Member
since 2001-05-28
Posts 1641Arkansas |
only when it is written on the heart does permanence remain…. Ahh, Sissie, the better part of all, is for all to remain...very nice write..very gentle smile |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
"curls to lines to curls encircling round white memories laden with burdens of permanence, not so easily deleted, even when held to flames before one’s eyes" My oh my that's so well written....I just wish I knew what it meant.....I know what I can do, I can ask Janet Marie, she'll know......yep fer sure! Beautiful piece all the way through! |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
Oooo, I love a poet's poem. I love this, Sunshine! "etch for me some remembrance that seeds sown will bear to nourish your soul" Indeed, indeed. "curls to lines to curls encircling round white memories laden with burdens of permanence, not so easily deleted, even when held to flames before one’s eyes" Funny, just the other night I was thinking about burning a piece . . . what's that all about . . . trying to be done with it??? Good work, this. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
curls to lines to curls encircling round white memories laden with burdens of permanence, not so easily deleted, even when held to flames before one’s eyes in its reality when one can feel between one’s finger the soul that made them become, ================================= write me… etch for me some remembrance that seeds sown will bear to nourish your soul even if no linen of lines curled to round lay between fingertips ================================ OH YOU KNOW...you must know, what Im about to say to this.... I WISH I HAD WROTE THIS!!! *smiling at Ethomes reply* read it as if you were holding it up to the flame... read it as if you were a moth  read it in my library cuz its a keeper A man who asks a woman to lie for him, is a man who will lie to that woman. |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
Excellent. I removed the "I's" earlier from a Love poem I wrote. As an open book I can appreciate subtlety in others. |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Uh...there is generally a switch of some kind, er, somewhere... Enjoyed this much my friend...wish my keys worked as well as yours... jwesley |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
I need to read this again, very good writing, the thoughts seem to spill over onto the keyboard, and yes, I think most of what you type is going to be permanent. Now, the other meanings in here, seem many and I have to re-read  sandra |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Ah, yes......you captured me with the ending! "..only if one knows how to turn it on"!! So well put, and so very true!!!!!  The road goes on forever, and the stories never end... |
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mirror man Senior Member
since 2001-01-08
Posts 814 |
etch for me some remembrance that seeds sown will bear to nourish your soul Very thoughtful piece, and tall order. Probably why the switch is so hard to find. |
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The Rusty Knight Member
since 2001-08-29
Posts 414Texas |
This is a simple and complex piece....I have read it several times and got something new out of it each time...I like *S* Death comes not when we cease to breathe, but when we cease to dream. [This message has been edited by The Rusty Knight (edited 09-05-2001).] |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
very nicely done.... very nice indeed.... tells much and in many ways... this is an excellent piece..well done my friend..well done indeed! |
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