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senyru with (irony or satire???)
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senyru with (irony or satire???) |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
no yellows here, just canines teeth of lust, gnashing © September 1, 2001 ~~~~~~~~~~~~ note, I know little of the islands, other than they were not named for the canary, but for canines/canus...so, in trying to write a senyru with satire or irony, I wrote the above playing with canines as the sharp, extremely pointed, killer-teeth, then thinking eating lustily, then because of lust...surely there would be the gnashing of teeth for eternity, unless forgiven and one ‘turns from one’s ways’ this was a fun attempt heh heh heh smile [This message has been edited by VAS (edited 09-01-2001).] |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
chomp chomp....giggle...helen |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
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Alan Senior Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 1499right next door |
Good job VAS. I like the style. nice read too alan |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
I like this V, but how about this for another take: Canary Islands no yellow wings, teeth instead Someone was bitten e |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
I like it, Krawdad! A new angle a different outcome. I do like the yellow wings as a better way to write the center line in both than what I wrote. I played with that line quite awhile, but not long enough. Thanks for the read and comment! |
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