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Genie of Love
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Genie of Love |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone 
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Oh magic Genie, come to me I've found your centuries old home come out and fulfill fantasies as Genies everywhere are known. I've contemplated all the odds the chance of good, the evil twist and now I rub my hands upon to see your face appear in mist. Don't ask me to wish only twice for I have many needs today though if you cannot give me thrice I'll tell you now, which ones shall stay. All children of the world have love and by the way, I want it too. Oh Genie, floating far above your power holds the key unto The door of peace and happiness the one I knock at constantly. Your magic can remove distress make dreams become reality. What payment shall you ask of me? I fear you may not be so kind But love is all that makes us free as you are too, since I did find. So, Magic Genie, lets begin and don't demand my very soul Help me bring love from where its been lost in the hateful, blackest hole. (This feels like it needs another verse, but I am stuck  ) |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
So, Magic Genie, lets begin and don't demand my very soul Help me bring love from where its been lost in the hateful, blackest hole. yes...is it not this we all wish to find and hold as most treasured of all..the ability to love and be love..the act of the feel of love... nicely done... I enjoyed! |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
The missing verse you feel you lack, (may I suggest?) we all dream of is let not our hope fade to black from your lamp shine the light of Love. |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
I didn't think it felt like it needed another verse. I like it just the way it is with the dark ending. Tracey |
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Alan Senior Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 1499right next door |
I think it's fine just the way it is. Good job. Enjoyed it alan |
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athena4 Senior Member
since 2000-12-10
Posts 622 |
Sandra, If only we could all have our own "Genie" to make all the elusive wishes come true....Great write, and great dream! Love, Elise |
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Janette
since 2001-07-20
Posts 2843Chicagoland for now |
A lovely read...rub hard...you deserve to have your wishes come true. Janette |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
"So, Magic Genie, lets begin and don't demand my very soul Help me bring love from where its been lost in the hateful, blackest hole" why does it seem it always comes with a BIG price to pay? helen |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
By the way, send that Genie over here. I've got a few wishes too If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
No, I don't think another verse is in order. But how about another poem? One to take us deeper into this wish. ??? (Seems such an odd thing, a wish.) |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
Great verse, but I bet if someone with the right touch and the right wishes for your happiness could let quite a Genie out of you! Sincerely, Regina |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
hey. . . I've got a lamp that you can use right here. . . great job my friend. . . ------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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