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talking to myself |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Soft sadness fell from your eyes barely making a sound I almost turned around but you hate it when I find you amongst the ruin of your choices so I furthered out the door left you to the voices little comfort could I have offered anyway I judge you too harshly I remember your reasons much too well I live with the consequences of your actions I am you talking to myself begging for mercy pleading insanity or at the very least uncertainty never did I expect to choose so wrong [This message has been edited by Duncan (edited 08-29-2001).] |
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wandering glider Senior Member
since 2001-04-04
Posts 501aloft |
The self examination goes on and on and on ... chapter after chapter. An endless topic to write about but maybe one of the best, certainly one of the truest, maybe the only true one. Enjoyed the read. \\ |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
this is so well done...how we chide ourselves because we know too much and yet, we are often way too harsh on ourselves because we keep forgetting the wonderful promise made us |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Duncan~ Start to finish ... I like everything about this piece~ ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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walker Member Elite
since 2001-02-11
Posts 2240Florida |
When we love, we feel what the other feels. Great self exploration here,we should always reinvent ourselves,(that's where I'm at right now)there's always room for improvement.Live and learn specially from our mistakes. Love this one. Thanks. |
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A Whisper's Caress Senior Member
since 2000-11-03
Posts 791on the horizon of a fairytale |
left you to the voices Wow, really great lines in this piece. Those voices can be deafening at times. May your dreams always dance to the rhythm of a lover's heartbeat... |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
wow..incredible piece! it could be many things..could be a relationship falling apart..could be about only you/your reflection..it says so much..and those deafening voices..sometimes you just wish, theyd scream in a real voice.. very well written..i'll keep this one to come back and read later.. hugs, g ~dgvarner/fallen rain~ |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"talking to myself begging for mercy pleading insanity or at the very least uncertainty" oh yes, I have a few times.  wow this is fantastic! I'm keeping this one |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
loved this! ~Tier |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
well done. . . a piece of your life. . . shared with us all. . . I really liked this one. . .it reminded me of me. . . in a way. . . -------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
So easy to forgive others, so difficult to forgive ourselves. How much easier we would breathe if we could. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
nicely written... nicely portrayed... I enjoyed this a great deal.. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
many many good lines...*s ~Wynter "The worst prison would be a closed heart". |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Great twist in this clever poem....It's a very good read! |
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