Open Poetry #15 |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
Picture Provided By Bernie Slicker Within I walked along the beach of blue tried to follow footprints left of you the wind had blown them all away so on the grains of blue I lost my way couldn’t find my direction anymore aimless to walk upon the shore I sat waiting for the tide to come in realizing the way home is within "...the rest is silence" (Hamlet) Shakespeare [This message has been edited by 1slick_lady (edited 08-29-2001).] |
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wandering glider Senior Member
since 2001-04-04
Posts 501aloft |
"the way home is within"... as it has always been. Enjoyed this. (Just for kicks, try dropping 'lost' in the third stanza and 'so' in the last stanza.) \\ |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
ok...done...helen |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
No critique required...only applause. |
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wandering glider Senior Member
since 2001-04-04
Posts 501aloft |
My, you're easy. No argument? |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
absolutely powerful! Profound, very well done! |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
ty duncan...helen wandering... still learning my craft so any help is welcomed...helen |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
oops vas...was typing as you were posting...ty...helen |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
OneSlickLady~ Very, very pretty~ ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
nice |
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Zinsser Senior Member
since 2001-02-27
Posts 1641Calif. |
This is very good.... |
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