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Under the Influence of You
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Under the Influence of You |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
 Although I’ll continue to frolic Along with the flowers on this path, I’ll always be silent in the presence Of the tremendous magnitude of your brilliance... I’ll maintain the daisies behind my ear, But I’ll never take for granted the roses You’ve planted in the conscious reverence of me... The ocean will always be My most influential supply of stimulation, But the clouds of glory in your eyes Will outshine it by far... I’ll continue to delight in drawing near To the air of magenta meadows, But the purity of your revitalizing breath Will instill life into my fragile optimism... Even though the stars will predominantly glisten Over my awestruck head, The sparkling rivers of vitality within your spirit Will catch my undivided interest... You should see the way the trees Bow in your presence, And how Luna glides a bit lower To catch a glimpse of your face... The scarlet day of blazing passion Yields when you arrive, And doubt’s vows to destroy my stability Wane when you push all else aside To hold me in your arms... The universe and all entailed therein Bow out of their distinguished positions With just a glance at the impact in your sweet caress... -kh it was love that first drew me, |
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walker Member Elite
since 2001-02-11
Posts 2240Florida |
SP- really beautiful, romantic and of course poetic  |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
soothed me, thank you so much for this one. " I walked beside the evening sea And dreamed a dream that could not be" George William Curtis" |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
YOU GOT THAT RIGHT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Now this is loaded with much promise and could give a guy a reason to actually get up in the morning. Beautiful sentiments and of course excellent imagery. Geeze, where did you learn to look at life like that? You MUST have had a GREAT teacher. LOL I know, I know......YOU WERE BORN WITH IT!!!! Wonderful write deary. Now don't forget about that BET poem you have to come up with. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is absolutely breathtaking, Kris! Very well done! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I’ll always be silent in the presence Of the tremendous magnitude of your brilliance... I’ll maintain the daisies behind my ear, But I’ll never take for granted the roses ================================= I’ll continue to delight in drawing near To the air of magenta meadows, But the purity of your revitalizing breath Will instill life into my fragile optimism... Even though the stars will predominantly glisten Over my awestruck head, The sparkling rivers of vitality within your spirit Will catch my undivided interest... You should see the way the trees Bow in your presence, And how Luna glides a bit lower To catch a glimpse of your face... The scarlet day of blazing passion Yields when you arrive, And doubt’s vows to destroy my stability Wane when you push all else aside To hold me in your arms... The universe and all entailed therein Bow out of their distinguished positions With just a glance at the impact in your sweet caress... ======================= Ummmmm ... DAMN!!!!  Whew...Im exhausted just reading the reverie in this... what a very cool poem, imagery and express. You've compliled quite a list of anticpation here, it was hard to pic out lines..they were all so grandious and full of vision, superb writing K, I do enjoy the way your poetic mind works.  jm slow burn ... light a candle for our love So that we will always be one on one in lovely love [This message has been edited by Janet Marie (edited 07-28-2001).] |
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shadow974 Senior Member
since 2001-06-21
Posts 636Michigan |
Beautifully and romanticly written, Great work. Throw your heart out in front of you |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
SnowPants~ 'The sparkling rivers of vitality within your spirit Will catch my undivided interest...' What breathtaking imagery this thought evokes~ ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
dont mind space cat me...I forgot to put this in me library last time ... I must have been distracted by all those daisys behind your ears *L* slow burn ... |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
The title was the first awesome thing that caught my attention. The rest held me captive with the honest eloquence and profoundly resonated with me in terms of the strength of emotion and comparisons contained herein... To be on the receiving end of such beauty and thought... Wow. Can you tell that I really, REALLY liked this one? -MVS "When you tell the Truth, you never have to remember what you just said." |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
(sorry it's taken me so long to thank you guys...  )walker: thank you, my friend...I'm glad you liked it!  Kathleen: you're very welcome! thank you for your kind reply! M: hey you...hmmm...reason to get up in the morning...well, it's either that or the train passing by... ...and, thank you, but I did have a little help in that area of seeing life "that way"...and, ahem...well, I guess I don't have anything smart to say about the bet poem...  ...BUT I'LL GET YOU BACK...hehe...  ...thank you so much, m'friend...I am happy you liked this...Denise: thank you, my friend...I'm glad you enjoyed! J: hey...poetic mind? well thank you...that is a rather high compliment...I think...hehe...but really, I am glad you enjoyed this so much, and thanks for your enthusiastic reply... shadow: thanks! happy you liked it! Marge: thanks, my friend, for your wonderful compliment...glad you enjoyed! J again: hmmm...the daisies...dunno 'bout that...could be all that pettin' of horses and whatnot...hehe MVS: well, I must say I am flattered and honored...I appreciate your reply, and I am really glad that you got into this so much...thanks!! sp  it was love that first drew me, |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
snowpants- Wow! This is gorgeous!! The imagery is just incredible! "You should see the way the trees Bow in your presence, And how Luna glides a bit lower To catch a glimpse of your face... Lovely!! hugs, ~vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truely met the poet." -vlraynes [This message has been edited by vlraynes (edited 08-29-2001).] |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
Why, thanks, vicky...I didn't expect to see this one again! I truly am glad you enjoyed it! sp tried to write a letter |
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