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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
(This is my first attempt at a sonnet...hope you like it!)  AND, thanks a million, Denise, for your help and title suggestion!  In Spring the mist above the waterline succumbs again to passion's pristine praise. How you view God in ev'ry part sublime depends on where you seek within dusk's blaze. The flood of hues sustains the stir of days in which a crimson palette should produce. I see where you would go for solace rays and night could use its pull and then seduce but dark will not succeed and will be loosed. Prepared for flight beyond the ploys galore above the silent turquoise beams induced magenta light helps evening's magic soar. Remains of treason know their claim is spent and in the stride of ease you'll dwell content. -kh tried to write a letter |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
snowpants I thoroughly enjoyed reading this piece with such wonderful imagery. Take care......Sue Suetang |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
How you view God in ev'ry part sublime depends on where you seek within dusk's blaze. The flood of hues sustains the stir of days in which a crimson palette should produce. I see where you would go for solace rays and night could use its pull and then seduce ======================================= above the silent turquoise beams induced magenta light helps evening's magic soar. ================================ Oh man,,now ya got me sooo green with poetic envy...I havent tried one yet..and YOU do it in one friggen day.... WAAAY cool especially when you consider how you have "run" from rhyme  nothing like jumping in the fire girlie... this is excellent and the imagery is a lovely as the pretty poetic phrases you wrapped them up in... very cool SP... now you knkow of course...I will expect mucho more rhymes from you   later sonnetbooty-gator jm Feels like Im dancin with truth and wisdom |
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Eloise Senior Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 1096Wyoming |
Excellent imagery. I still have yet to try a sonnet. I applaud you. Well done! |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
BRAVO!! A perfect Spenserian sonnet! You already know how impressed I am! One thing though I forgot to tell you about writing sonnets....it is addictive, so I'm sure we'll be seeing more! Excellent job, Kris, even if it weren't your very first! |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Bravo!!!! Never tried one and I honestly doubt I could ever touch this one...beautiful work!! |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Scintillating sonnet! Wonderful, and for a first effort, magnificent! Like Denise said, perfect. ENCORE! Homepage : http://members.home.net/excalibur2501/interloper.htm |
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poetsguild Member
since 2001-08-12
Posts 85Florida |
I admire anyone who attempts to write a sonnet. Sounded good to the ear and I definitely enjoyed the imagery. Good work, snowpants. |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
Sue: thank you, my friend...I'm glad you enjoyed it!  J: oh, Lord...what the HECK did I get myself into now??? just don't let the word spread to a certain Aquarian, from whom I will never hear the end of this... ...but, thanks, girlie...I'm absolutely SURE you could do this--I have no doubt at all...and, another thing...it certainly gets the juices flowin' again, too...although I tried to tell my friend at work about it and said it was fun and all and she said, fun? that sounds more like Chinese water torture to me...  ...but, glad you liked it, J... Eloise: thank you...I'm not saying there's nothing to it, but, once you start, it sorta takes on a life of its own...thanks for your kind reply! Denise: thank you again, m'friend, for all of your help with this...I truly appreciate it! and, yeah, I did enjoy writing this once it got started...I'm glad you enjoyed this, too!  butterflies: thank you so much! I am happy you liked this! it's fun though...you really should try it...thanks! Interloper: thanks! I appreciate your compliments! glad you enjoyed! poetsguild: thank you for taking the time to read and reply...glad you liked it! sp  tried to write a letter |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Jeepers, creepers, I was going to give it a shot, but now you scared me girl! This was absolutely amazing in flow, imagery, and content. BRAVA! ~*Homepage*~ http://www.mysteria-poetry.cityslide.com/contents/contents.cfm/722155 |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
SnowPants~ A lovely, lovely piece for sure ! Muchly enjoyed~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This deserves another go 'round! |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Sooooooooo ... let's see now ... Perfect meter, excellent syllable count, beautiful RHYME ( yes, RHYME ) and of course as lovely as the heart that wrote it. Well, I do believe that you just proved ME right when I said that you can do conquer anything that you want to if only you try. Thank you for that and for sharing superb first Sonnet of yours with us all. You do know of course that I will be expecting many more from you and I don't give up on what I want. Love ya and your way of stretching yourself. |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
Mysteria: thank you for your enthusiastic reply, but I am certain it is not out of your range...I appreciate your compliments! Marge: thank you, my friend, for your kind reply! Denise: thanks so much for the 'bump!' I'm excited you liked it that much! M: oh, baby, don't I know it...believe me, I wouldn't even dream of denying you of something...  ...but, really, thank you...you know me and new things...getting somewhat acquainted is the hard part...love ya, sweets...good Lord, I MISS YOU TOO!!  sp tried to write a letter |
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