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kaile

Member Ascendant

since 2000-02-06

Posts 5146
singapore

0 posted 2001-08-28 02:38 PM

on a bus,
while you were
amusing yourself
with my handphone
and i was intent on
scratching my rashes
(both literal and metaphorical),
you disclosed
you were attached

you robbed me
of the chance
to congratulate myself
on my well-worded subtle questions
while forcing me
to attend
a heart contraction operation

i was able
to keep my voice
bright and cheery,
my corny jokes kept erupting,
though i had serious misgivings
about the condition of my life-sustainer

do they use concentrated acid as anaesthetic these days?

i will be stating the obvious
(and so be it)

but gosh, how it hurt!!

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

1 posted 2001-08-28 02:45 PM

Nice metaphorical references throughout...and a nicely told story although ( obviously) a painful experience.

Yes it may be obvious... but it does hurt...

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

2 posted 2001-08-28 03:31 PM

wow, this is painful to read, have been there soooooo many times before. Hugs to you

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

3 posted 2001-08-28 09:42 PM

a moment captured my friend. . .

well done. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

dgvarner
Member Elite

since 2000-05-13

Posts 3552
High Springs, Florida

4 posted 2001-08-28 10:00 PM

i DO love the way youve written this! a painful moment..i know..but a great write out of it, my friend..!

hugs, g

~dgvarner/fallen rain~

"i believe we are here for a reason.
as each day unfolds,
we see less of the shadow
and more of the sun" -unknown

Alan
Senior Member

since 2000-09-12

Posts 1499
right next door

5 posted 2001-08-28 10:23 PM

ouch...that does hurt. great read
alan

kaile

Member Ascendant

since 2000-02-06

Posts 5146
singapore

6 posted 2001-08-28 11:09 PM

thank you all for reading and commenting...i was rather devastated that night but well, life goes on...

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