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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
There is not much light here but enough. I do not appear well in full search of sun You may see a part of the image shown but detail is best left hidden. Like the limbs of trees on dark nights shapes seen make imagination materialize what we think not what is... I might touch and feel the touch of hand on chest, in absent way when one is in midst of heated longing But I cannot touch the heart of you... for there though guarded well you would feel a fool not now but later when you had warmed yourself on me and tasted again the things you so desire I would be reviled Trickster with no depth no want to be less or more than the scars I am It is not light here but light enough to see the lines drawn the reflections shown from flickering flames In all I see In all I desire I would destroy |
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Decaflame Senior Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 1635 |
Your character sounds fierce... which portends an excellence in writing... well done, Sir... |
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darkling Member
since 2001-08-28
Posts 90altered state of mind |
I enjoyed it very much, please keep writing. The especially enjoyed the dark aspect, and I cant think of the correct word, but the sort of formal way of speaking? i dont know, im not good with words. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Like the limbs of trees on dark nights shapes seen make imagination materialize what we think not what is... Sort of like a Rorschach Test? And although you may think somethings better left to the imagination? Well, let's just say I flunked the Roschach test... sigh..bleak...CH...ze good doctor prescribes therapeutic dancing!  |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
wow....wow.....wow..... ok, I can't think of anything else to say except this is awesome |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Very intense, emotional, love it! Sandra |
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Zinsser Senior Member
since 2001-02-27
Posts 1641Calif. |
Very Good... |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
CPatHair~ WOW ! I like this~ 'shapes seen make imagination materialize what we think not what is...' Isn't that the 'amen' of it ! ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
My...different, my friend, and wonderful. Even better the second - third read. jwesley |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Trickster with no depth no want to be less or more than the scars I am I could have cut and pasted this whole poem. Damn, you're good. |
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A Whisper's Caress Senior Member
since 2000-11-03
Posts 791on the horizon of a fairytale |
I might touch and feel the touch of hand on chest, in absent way when one is in midst of heated longing But I cannot touch the heart of you... for there though guarded well you would feel a fool truly amazing...every line. May your dreams always dance to the rhythm of a lover's heartbeat... |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
A captivating write Cpat! Like the old saying.."Reality seldom bears the possibility of imagination" Very interesting and intense read! |
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