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A Smile For Every Afterlife
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A Smile For Every Afterlife |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada 
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I was dealing with pain, the first night that I met her. I felt a melting on the air as we spoke to tell our stories at a party of mutual friends. Her mother schooled nodding head led the conversation easily. Above a long evening gown her words flowing effortlessly from a pale face long since kissed. That night easily marked the best time of my last two years. I haven't seen eyes I'd remember or really looked for since then. She was ex-wife strained, living in heart imposed exile just lately forcing herself from the past. But instantly her look showed her deference, open minded but struggling with divorce vibrations. Her heart well sheltered, she uncovered, searching within my eyes, my worth that was leaning toward her. I stopped and caught my thinking my heart leaping, I was headed into a world of pressing. The night and time were truly hers She'd climbed a wall and jumped from the past, a lifetime of work. The wishing for forever gone wifely anxieties pushed from her mind. Now here she was a shy divorcee her children and her ideals grown but always welcome. I loved the trance,the spell, grasping warmth from my fire. I inhaled her perfumed words, the spilling of her refreshed innocence cut through my stale heart and started my inner music. I moved closer, a love magnet caught up in her positive pull with my negative world about to sail. The first of many dances she drew to me pressed into my arms by trusting choice. Swaying with my willing touches I pulled her closer and brushed her cheek, scaring myself sick! - she smiled sweetly and the feeling numbed my legs for a minute. The night now lost in fervor memories of past closeness filling my head. The heat of her breathing added an ardent swell to my open breast. Grasping to deal with the nuance of her, my nevermore ruled over by insight, an unexpected stabbing at conclusion.... "She's got to be forever!" I pushed up closer to her blithe frame in her eyes I smiled to see her wish of want to cross forbidden lines. I felt the silly schoolboy, rearing in me so suddenly My heart, strained to keep control soaring! Only we, knew what was happening, talking through the tall past We reached the border of vulnerability together. We left together laughing right past the astonished staring eyes. In the morning light I was blessed with her keen smile searching me, both of us still caressing, in the warm sweet spent silence the constant tangent of ripening love. She said sheepishly, "I'd almost forgotten!" and smiled that afternight soothing smile and that was six years ago. I'm still waking to that smile like a drink of fresh water every morning! A smile for every afterlife! The role of poetry is to utter the un-utterable; to open up spaces of consciousness and resistance; to language oppressions; to re-language historie [This message has been edited by ethome (edited 08-28-2001).] |
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Decaflame Senior Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 1635 |
"talking through the tall past..." a wonderful recall of a life worth living now.... enjoyable read, and thank you! It's been awhile! |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
lovely read..and wondefully told story... a pleasure indeed... well done sir... well done |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
loved it, E..beautiful "Her heart well sheltered, she uncovered, searching within my eyes, my worth that was leaning toward her." * your words are worth alot in my eyes..always *s ~Wynter [This message has been edited by nakdthoughts (edited 08-28-2001).] |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you Decaflame, Cpat and Wynter! I appreciate the time you took to read this! I'll be looking for you! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Ethome, Your words move like an ell through seaweed. More then well done, excellent. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I loved the trance,the spell, grasping warmth from my fire. I inhaled her perfumed words, the spilling of her refreshed innocence cut through my stale heart and started my inner music. I moved closer, a love magnet caught up in her positive pull with my negative world about to sail. The first of many dances she drew to me pressed into my arms by trusting choice. Swaying with my willing touches I pulled her closer and brushed her cheek, scaring myself sick! - she smiled sweetly and the feeling numbed my legs for a minute. The night now lost in fervor memories of past closeness filling my head. The heat of her breathing added an ardent swell to my open breast. Grasping to deal with the nuance of her, my nevermore ruled over by insight, an unexpected stabbing at conclusion.... "She's got to be forever!" =================================== "We reached the border of vulnerability together." Oh man!! Eric this is wonderful...what a beautiful weave of words and emotions. so romantic and a happy ending as a bonus... very cool E-babes... have I told you lately .. I LOVE THE WAY YOU WRITE  "Vantastic poet pal"  |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
ethome--you pulled me into this courtship, in the telling with such original and human pen, then left me smiling at the end. Wonderful!! |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
*wow*....I thoroughly enjoyed it...my dear friend. excellent as always. Charisma |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
My goodness, this was a fantastic story, and told so well. Written with love.. Just wonderful Sandra |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"We reached the border of vulnerability together." Oh my Eric ... so many incredible phrases within this lovely piece of remembrance! This is so beautiful, truly a wonderful read. Very nicely written indeed! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
ethome What an exquisite piece of writing you have given us. I thought it captured the essence of true romance and dedication to the one you love, someone who is so obviously a very special part of your life. Wonderful words!! Take care......Sue Suetang |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
You sure can tell a tale sweet poet man |
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2dalimit Member Elite
since 2000-02-08
Posts 2228Mississippi coast |
What a captivating romantic tale. ...an unexpected stabbing at conclusion.... "She's got to be forever!"... Fate, I suppose. I enjoyed the read. Melton |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
ethome, what can I add to what has already been said? This is wonderfully romantic, beautifully told. I loved it. Dee I wish you every happiness and may you always have the best of the good things in life. a brand |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Have to mock Dee here ethome...wonderful story and really nice to see the end that tied it all together...best wishes forever... jwesley |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
good seeing you enjoy |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
This one just drew me in again and again...fantastic write Eric |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you Seymour I appreciate the words of kindness! Janet my poet pet I knew you'd relate to this one and I sure appreciate the exuberant comment! Martie I'll always like it if I can leave you smiling! Thanks THanks Charisma I'm glad you got the chance to read this! I appreciate your input catalinamoon. I'm pleased that you could read this love story! Kit we all have our guard up somewhat but we also have a point of vulnerability. Thanks for your kind words! Suetang I'm glad you felt the essence of romance here ...much appreciated! Paula you dear sweet poet lady I love telling a story for you! Thanks 2dalimit I guess it could be fate or whatever happens in that case...we are all so connected! Thanks Dee! For dropping in to read! James thanks for the forever word very kind of you! Vandana thank for reading once again! Paula I really appreciate it thanks! |
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