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Confessions Of A Young Girl
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Confessions Of A Young Girl |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Still, Brown eyes with hazel captured me without a smile As you, in unusual fashion, began to tell me of the things the day had brought and finally of the shadows I had seen inside you... you spoke of a father who was too free with hands and of a mother to weak to understand I listened, heart bleeding anger building, with each telling wanting to comfort or save you, but you were not ready for saving. Dusk turned to stars as you, talked out, took my hand and asked if we could go sit in the loft just for a while just for a smile. I followed your lead until it led my hand to the place between your legs and you whispering "please" I kissed you, then as gently as I could told you I was not your father you did not have to do this for me to care You cried then Leaving the tears To stain my memory Still |
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Decaflame Senior Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 1635 |
Wow.... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
damn .... so much could be said.... and yet...words seem too little...... excellent writing poet sir. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Absolutely heartbreaking. A poignant rendering of compassion and understanding. Completely powerful my friend. |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Cpat--I'm at a loss for words here but would like to give you a hug! |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Deca.. thank you Janet... Yes much could be said about abuse... and much has.. thank you for the nice words.. Serenity... thank you kind lady...for the comment and the thoughts Martie... come her you old softy.. I'll hug you ( with an evil grin) Thank you Martie... Folks.... this was a long long time ago..and I was the very close to the same age as the young girl...so I was not the father figure sought by a younger girl then. I did later in life have the experience of dealing with a family member... that had been molested and came to stay with me..she was terribly confused and hurt...terribly vulnerable... We tried couseling, intervention..and all the things we could...but she chose to seek a path in life that has only amplified her pains and problems... my heart goes out to all that may have faced such situations... Thanks for the comments...and now...I have said all I can say about this... |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Oh wow. This was upsetting, sad, and amazingly good all at the same time. Oi vey.... Jenn "Baby I've been drifting away, dreaming all day, of holding you, touching you, the only thing that I wanna do is be with you..."Faith Hill [This message has been edited by Jenn Cirrincione (edited 08-28-2001).] |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Excellent write Cpat just a great read! |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
i went "wow" like duncan did and have no hesitation admitting that this is one of the best poems i have seen in passions in a while  |
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DawnG
since 2000-06-23
Posts 1494United States |
I'm sorry, but my only response that comes to mind right now is also Wow! If I think of something else, I'll be back. Dawn |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
CPatHair~ This is one of the tenderest pieces on a tough subject I've ever read. I'd like to double that hug~ ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Powerfully written CPat ... you've tacked a difficult subject with sensitivity and eye-opening awareness that strikes hard through these lines. Well done. Best wishes, /Kit |
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RoseThorn New Member
since 2001-08-28
Posts 5US - NY |
i have to agree with everyone else when i say "wow"... it's so sad, but extremely touching. i can't imagine..... ~Every Rose Has It's Thorn...~ |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
Dear C, I sincerely sit here in gratitude for the compassion and courage of this verse, and reality blink of this crisis. It's hard to write about the transgressions of those who violate the innocent. Even harder to imagine the victim's pain and know of it up close. Thank you for trying to direct the wounded to a path of healing. Big Hug to you. Sincerely, Regina It's all in the mind |
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illusion Member
since 2001-06-19
Posts 296 |
Sometimes a person is fortunate enough to encounter just the right person at just the right time. She found such a person that day and I honor you for your compassion. I also salute you for a magnificent poem. |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
In my travels through myriad poetic web sites it amazes me how world wide spread this problem is. Ordinarily the victim either becomes promiscious or so frigid and frightened they cannot maintain a normal loving relationship. You responded as a real and strong man would. I salute you. |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
ok, am typing through tears, and I don't know what to say other than this is incredible, not only as a piece of very touching writing, but as a reflection on you, the author....big hugs |
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Lisann Member
since 2001-01-31
Posts 350 |
Well, it appears as though I have opened the door to writing and posting about abuse. Good. This can no longer be kept silent. SILENCE PROMOTES ABUSE. Very tender piece here. |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
I have watched over the last few years as several here at Passions have had to deal with this matter. Several have tried to put it across, but none so well as you have done... you've shown both sides, and I salute your endeavors to keep lines of communication open.... yours is a heart flung wide open. |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
*Tiers* ~Tier |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Profound write! ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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walker Member Elite
since 2001-02-11
Posts 2240Florida |
Well expressed, many realities here. |
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