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PoeticKnight
Senior Member

since 2000-01-20

Posts 1144
New Orleans, LA

0 posted 2001-08-28 09:42 AM

Would that words could suffice to comfort thee
Thou would have an array of loving praise
Set thenceforth before other eyes to see
Proclaimed upon gilded horns thereby raised
If only words could take the place of arms
To be thy strength, echo of heart’s resound
To offer safe harbor from constant harm
And delve deeper thou love to depths profound
Yet, cold is the comfort that they contain
A mere shadow impaled by the darkness
Of thy ever distant heart to maintain
With but words written by a pen’s caress

Shall words bring all of warmth and love to thee?
Shall in reading, bring thou closer to me?

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

1 posted 2001-08-28 09:51 AM

If only words could take the place of arms
To be thy strength, echo of heart’s resound
To offer safe harbor from constant harm
And delve deeper thou love to depths profound
Yet, cold is the comfort that they contain
A mere shadow impaled by the darkness
Of thy ever distant heart to maintain
With but words written by a pen’s caress

Shall words bring all of warmth and love to thee?
Shall in reading, bring thou closer to me?
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Well, It works for me *L*
BEAUTIFUL sonnet PK...
with your gift of cadence, your pen was born to write these.
excellent.
jm

Decaflame
Senior Member

since 2001-05-11

Posts 1635

2 posted 2001-08-28 09:53 AM

Indeed....

and thank you for sharing....

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

3 posted 2001-08-28 09:53 AM

Love the old style of writing!  Great message!   Are words enough?

               "To be thy strength, echo of heart’s resound
                To offer safe harbor from constant harm
                And delve deeper thou love to depths profound
                Yet, cold is the comfort that they contain
                A mere shadow impaled by the darkness
                Of thy ever distant heart to maintain
                With but words written by a pen’s caress"

Very creative! A very enjoyable read!

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

4 posted 2001-08-28 01:42 PM

this is wonderful, and so romantic.
I am just getting the hang of these sonnets
they are so fun to do, but I don't think I'll ever be able to do them this good LOL
I can try though

at any rate, this is beautiful

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

5 posted 2001-08-28 11:50 PM

I forgot to mention how impressive the language, vocabulary, and phrasing in this is...as well as the clever premise behind the poems theme...the turn of phrase and word play/play on words..very cool idea...
and this is sheer rhyme divine when read aloud...
and OK...I forgot to put it in my library *L*

"oh you speak to me in riddles
and you speak to me in rhymes
my body aches to breathe your breath
your words keep me alive"

~Sarah McLachlan~

vandana

Member Patricius

since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

6 posted 2001-08-29 11:29 AM

enjoyed

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

7 posted 2001-08-29 06:54 PM

well done Sir. . . you know that you've always got me when you start using the old phrases. . .

I'm with SEA, I don't know that I'll ever be able to do these this well. . . perhaps if I read more of yours. . .

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snowpants
Member Elite

since 2000-09-16

Posts 2061
KS

8 posted 2001-08-29 08:05 PM

Absolutely beautiful sentiments, PK...written with your usual excellence in rhyme and cadence and all that...I love it!

sp

tried to write a letter
to tell you how I feel,
but all I kept on writing
was slipping on the tears from the day...

ShannonM
Member

since 2001-07-28

Posts 104
Drifitng

9 posted 2001-08-30 05:55 PM

Very sweet and romantic.

ShannonM

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