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Gwendrina Junior Member
since 2001-08-21
Posts 33 |
 On rare occasions, he sees a peacock fly past rooftops covering their bald heads with the evening sun The bird’s tail wavers on the breeze as if a woman were shaking dry one of her silk nightgowns. He thinks its plumed movement slurs accents of green and blue tree and lake youth and meditation. Should I tell him you are thinking in a moonlit garden a thousand miles away. Snow-feathered boughs of evergreen sweep the night air and you dream of peacocks bleached white like bed sheets; and winter’s loneliness mating with you when you should be mating with him in mountain waters under an eyebrow of shade -- arched, hinting at eternity. |
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cpalmer Senior Member
since 2001-06-26
Posts 977Phoenix, Az |
This is beautiful! Cindi |
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HopelessRomanticGuy Member
since 2001-08-17
Posts 495LI, New York |
Hmm... Subtle glimpses at their fate, touching but never grasping....... That is a valid interpretation is it not? Sorry, I'm a little thick at times. I hope I got it right. Well anyway, this poem is very good, at least in the eyes of this once-reluctant junior poet. I really liked this, it's going in my library. I hope to see more work from u soon. Rich Love will come and love will go, but friends are forever (usually). |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
This is so softly penned. I really enjoyed the feathery effect of this write. As if either place would be more beautiful than the other, but I would have a hard time choosing, the imagery so exquisite. Very nicely done! Sincerely, Regina |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
GwenDrina~ Exquisite imagery. And 'to-die-for' photo. Thank you for sharing~ ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
wonderfully done. . . and softly written. . . excellent. . . --------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Gwendrina Junior Member
since 2001-08-21
Posts 33 |
Hi Everyone, I would just like to say Thank you all so much for reading and commenting. I truly appreciate your thoughtful consideration and kind words. wendy |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
This was beautiful from beginning to end and the cadence is nothing less than masterful. I loved the imagery, the flow and the construction of this entire piece. Great penning indeed. |
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