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1slick_lady
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0 posted 2001-08-23 04:39 PM



Clear Tones

last night
I heard the serenade
of two hearts
in beat
and breath replacing
the song of loneliness
in disappearing defeat
with this new lullaby
the music
of a different ache
not the one of empty
but the one
hearts touching makes
it is the symphony
of our souls
the song
we long to hear
yes I heard
the song last night
whole notes played
tone clear

"...the rest is silence" (Hamlet)  Shakespeare

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1 posted 2001-08-23 04:41 PM


Whole notes
played clear.


a very descriptive image here... one I liked a lot!!!

As Usual... very nicely done...and I enjoyed the upbeat feel of it..


serenity blaze
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2 posted 2001-08-23 04:43 PM


damn...I feel like such a voyeur!
Makes my heart soar...there is much "peace" about this day--(pluto went direct-- ) Enjoyed, Lady.

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3 posted 2001-08-23 05:18 PM


whole notes played
tone clear


Like this a lot, but especially the vividness of these two lines...great ending!

jellybeans
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4 posted 2001-08-23 05:24 PM


very nice, love the 'wanting' feel to your poems....i miss that in mine...sigh
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5 posted 2001-08-23 05:28 PM


the music
of a different ache
not the one of empty
but the one
hearts touching makes

WOW!  This was fantastic!

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