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Decaflame
Senior Member

since 2001-05-11

Posts 1635

0 posted 2001-08-07 05:14 PM

sauntering on

‘tis not like me to
keep from
rambling
now and then

but brambling
bushes pulled at
the last soiree
into your
desires

as fires
were quenched
by giving rains

then I thought
briefly not to go
there again
but your pleas
pleased, so
I answered
and voila,
the scrambling
comes again

as bramble
berries are sweet
this time of
year,

and I desire a
sip of your
wine, so my
dear,

I shall
ramble
carefully
around the
brambles,
as
bushes pull
to twist at
my cloth of
memory
of the time
I came into your
spare-fully but
sweetly
desired kiss

recalling the
sun,
white clouds
that smelled
of rain
and thundering
waves on
distant sands,

salt-air on
my lungs, yes,
I could
ramble
with the
best

knowing you
were
on the edge
of my
quest

‘tis time
to ramble on
again

my horizon
is closer
than it
seems

[This message has been edited by Sunshine (edited 08-23-2001).]

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

1 posted 2001-08-07 05:32 PM

absolutely love this.....
every word

howpeculiar
Member

since 2000-12-12

Posts 56

2 posted 2001-08-07 05:38 PM

I floated a bit, taking light pleasure in the read and then:

I shall
ramble
carefully
around the
brambles,
as
bushes pull
to twist at
my cloth of
memory
of the time
I came into your
spare-fully but
sweetly
desired kiss

*sigh* You had me lol

This is much more gentle version than the usual “Should we begin again?” verse … here there is a sort of quiet determination tucked over the doubts (which while abrasive, seem almost romanticized), and the longing is not for memory (though that serves as a sweet reminder) but for the promise of future. WELL done.

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

3 posted 2001-08-07 06:14 PM

Deca--

I think you should ramble..how could you not? "as bramble bushes are sweet this time of year".. This is wonderful!

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

4 posted 2001-08-08 02:10 AM

I could ramble on about the blackberries a little one and I picked and ate all the way home until our hands were stained with laughter, but I won't

this was delicious!

~ To see real beauty you must look with your heart ~
~* Mysteria *~

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

5 posted 2001-08-22 10:50 PM

Decaflame-
   I, for one, LOVE the way you ramble!
   This is wonderful!

   hugs,
   ~vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his
heart, you have not truely met the poet."
-vlraynes

Gwendrina
Junior Member

since 2001-08-21

Posts 33

6 posted 2001-08-23 12:53 PM

Hi Decaflame,

I like the rhythm and tone in this poem. It really captures the essence of "Sauntering on". Also enjoyed the subtle rhyme and imagery interjected between the thoughtss.

Nice one!
Wendy

GracefullyPoetic
Junior Member

since 2001-08-23

Posts 14
AZ, USA

7 posted 2001-08-23 01:02 PM

WOW! This was such an incredible poem! You should think about entering some contests with this one! It's a winner!

-- Heather

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

8 posted 2001-08-23 01:19 PM

well now..the paths chosen do suit and the state of mind seems to be quite serene... a good read and a well written verse... I enjoyed the journey... and the thoughts.

Auguste

Member Elite

since 2000-02-16

Posts 3953
By the sea

9 posted 2001-08-23 02:03 PM

You're just a rambling gal, you.

I like!

Michael

Michael Auguste~
There is more depth to the heart than the mind can comprehend and it only has boundaries when we choose to fence it in.

Interloper

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

10 posted 2001-08-23 02:47 PM

My eyes just tumbled down the pae, devouring each word and phrase. Delightful reading.

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

11 posted 2001-08-23 05:23 PM

ramble in the bramble

a great preamble

to an ambulatory love

yes, they surely do taste sweet this time of year

amble on

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

12 posted 2001-08-23 05:37 PM

as
bushes pull
to twist at
my cloth of
memory
of the time
I came into your
spare-fully but
sweetly
desired kiss

love your wordings...*s

~Wynter

"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II

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