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serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

0 posted 2001-08-22 06:16 AM

I set the sail
I let the wind
take me to
the ocean's end

I cannot fail
I let it be
moss in search
of stone in me.

a gatherer of things I own
a princess fighting for the throne...
Simple thoughts
in simple head
become complex
and make life dead--
I'd do anything instead
of standing, here,
in tears of dread
all my life in front of me...
and all my past won't let me be.

And I could cry--
present the past--
I'd have a case
of circumstance.
I have the grave.
I have the bones.
The sextant dragging up
the stone.
I have the hole,
dug six feet deep--
before you stands
remains of me...

I have the ghost
of all I was
and all the seasons
of unjust--
don't we all
have pleas to plea?
We pray to Gods
that they might weep
within their hearts...
may mercy bleed
and with our godless eyes---
Gods see.

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

1 posted 2001-08-22 07:01 AM

all my life in front of me...
and all my past won't let me be.

And I could cry--
present the past--
I'd have a case
of circumstance.
I have the grave.
I have the bones.
The sextant dragging up
the stone.
I have the hole,
dug six feet deep--
before you stands
remains of me...

I have the ghost
of all I was
and all the seasons
of unjust--
don't we all
have pleas to plea?
We pray to Gods
that they might weep
within their hearts...
may mercy bleed
and with our godless eyes---
Gods see.
===================================

achingly beautiful sen...
with your gift of turn of phrase set in soft rhymes.
beautiful bittersweet plea
me

Feels like Im dancin with truth and wisdom
Precious rhythm you are my guide
These days are sacred, my heart is humble
Oh warrior show me thy light

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

2 posted 2001-08-22 08:43 AM

We pray to Gods
that they might weep
within their hearts...
may mercy bleed
and with our godless eyes---
Gods see.

strong ending..and one strengthened by the imagery preceding it... again very nicely done....

doreen peri
Member Elite

since 1999-05-25

Posts 3812
Virginia

3 posted 2001-08-22 10:43 AM

damn girl!! you're a POET!!! *smile*.... too many great lines to quote

what remains of you
remains in me,
your voice a lyric,
passioned, free,
your soul now shone
through eyes that see
remaining you
inside of me....

all that to say, great write, harpo! *wink

leafseranade
Member

since 2001-07-06

Posts 118
Wisconsin, USA

4 posted 2001-08-23 05:42 PM

Wow. I really loved this!

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

5 posted 2001-08-23 05:56 PM

Do you hear an echo in here? Ditto what Doreen said, except the Harpo part, and yuppers told ya, a poet indeed - this was absolutely awesome chicky!

~*If you can't say anything nice about someone, don't say anything at all*~ hmmm...they were smart whomever said that!

Waseem Cheema
Member

since 2001-03-16

Posts 369
Pakistan

6 posted 2001-08-24 12:46 PM

It is wounderful and beautiful full of reality and truth

ramrog
Member

since 2001-08-22

Posts 50

7 posted 2001-08-24 02:21 AM

This is powerfully stated.

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