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back in the days |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA 
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this place isn't like it used to be not like back in the days back in the days, we used to play and run and when the day was done we never said goodbye because there was always another day to come but, that was back in the days this place isn't like it used to be not like back in the days back in the days, we used to laugh and shout and when the shouting was done we'd call each other friend and swear we'd be that way till the end but, that was back in the days this place isn't like it used to be not like back in the days back in the days, we used to wonder and dream and when the dream was done we'd wake up as adults and lament that our dreams were forever gone wanting to be back in the days ------------------------------------------------------ To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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poetsguild Member
since 2001-08-12
Posts 85Florida |
I like the repetition in this poem, Sven. Makes it ever so nostalgic. Good work. |
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cpalmer Senior Member
since 2001-06-26
Posts 977Phoenix, Az |
OH Sven! To be back in the days of carelessness! Happy and fun and free...Back in the days of hopeful dreams...that's where I want to be! I love your writing friend! Cindi God is our inspiration; Words of the heart can be music to our ears |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
and when the dream was done we'd wake up as adults and lament that our dreams were forever gone wanting to be back in the days I love...'wake up as adults'...it does so feel that way. I like this poem alot. |
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Secret Whisper Member
since 2001-01-25
Posts 298Through the Looking Glass |
That was marvelous. I can't give you "Constructive" critiques because I feel you wrote it very well. My compliments. "We also know how cruel the truth often is, and we wonder whether delusion is not more consoling."- Henri Poincare (1854-1912) |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Nice touch Sven....very well done with repetition for emphasis! |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
This day too will become one of those days gone by... One we'll long to return to..What we do with it is our choice... Nicely said, Sven..  |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
poets guild, thank you. . . coming home again just makes the memories flow. . . cindi, thank you. . . I have a feeling that it's where we all want to be. . . duncan, it felt that way for me. . . especially now. . . thank you my friend. . . secret whisper, thank you my friend, glad that you liked this one. . . ethome, thank you Sir. . . I like the repeating lines as well. . . Nan, thank you. . . indeed, this day will be one that we long for in some later time. . . why is that? Thanks for your words. . . To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
I really liked the way you constucted this piece and added the repetitive lines in it. It lends to the read well and when I read it aloud, the longing of the words rang deep. Well written indeed. |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
It sure isn't the same as it used to be, not in any part of my life..I know just what you mean. This applies to so many things. It does feel like nothing lasts forever, the good stuff at least. Like this lots. Sandra |
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Eloise Senior Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 1096Wyoming |
back in the days ... yes, that would be nice. Excellent read Sven. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Mark, thank you. . . longing indeed is the general feeling here. . . but. . . things must change. . . Sandra, it does seem that way doesn't it?? I wonder why. . . thank you my friend. . . Eloise, I can think of nothing better. . . thank you for reading. . . -------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
"Those were the days my friend, I thought they'd never end ...." Perfectly penned by the gr8 voice of the Northland. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Ahh sweet nostalgia. With memories of the Dream Cruise still dancin' in my head. Nancy. ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
nice |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Sven, What a wonderful reminder of how things were and how they still could be. I thoroughly enjoyed your poem. Thank you Larry |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Interloper, that's the right song my friend. . . thank you. . . Enchantress, I wish that I could have been on that Cruise. . . thank you. . . vandana, thank you for reading my friend. . . Larry, thank you my friend. . .and welcome!!! ---------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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