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RSWells
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since 2001-06-17

Posts 2533

0 posted 2001-08-19 04:10 PM

It was pain and loneliness
which brought me to this point,
a dash of despair and a need
to sing the requiem
while still of voice.

Influences whose confluence
like the Allegheny and Monongahela
would ideally merge to form
a stronger flow, in the same
direction under a more manageable
heading, like the Ohio.

Not so much sink or swim
as bob and weave occasionally
gasping but then,
sometimes making sense
of the gurgle.

Tributaries test temperatures
and the pace, streaming
both freshness and pollutents
into overall experience.

The heart pumps a red, heavy
flow but too includes oxygen
in a life giving performance
where insistent buoyancy
carries a long way down
the river we travel.

I'll take the intermittent rapids
so long as the overall journey
averages an eased passing
of the tide and time
and the trip includes some moments
lazing in a warming sun.

If in its progress this
river reveals a snag in the form
of a teasing bobber of hope
whose hook's baited with
the lure of Love I'll bite,

but know the journey's
taken alone and ends
in a sea of forever.

Denise

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-08-22

Posts 22648

1 posted 2001-08-19 05:29 PM

Very well written, RS! I enjoyed reading this very much!

Sunshine

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Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

2 posted 2001-08-19 06:19 PM

Well done, Sir...enjoyed this a great deal...

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

3 posted 2001-08-19 07:47 PM

RSWells~
Oh, I like this so much.
The mention of two of my favorite poetically-named rivers had a bunch-a-lot to do with the enjoyment~
And it 'twarn't the Ohio !
Thank you~
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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rwood
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since 2000-02-29

Posts 3793
Tennessee

4 posted 2001-08-20 07:07 AM

If in its progress this
river reveals a snag in the form
of a teasing bobber of hope
whose hook's baited with
the lure of Love I'll bite,

but know the journey's
taken alone and ends
in a sea of forever.

Very well said! Wonderful metaphor. The whole poem is fantastic, but this part is wise and promising. Enjoyed so much!

Sincerely,
Regina

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

5 posted 2001-08-20 09:16 AM

well done sir.. as usual, you have painted the words and the images in such a way the lines carry you... a bit like the current...from here to there...

I enjoyed

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

6 posted 2001-08-20 09:37 AM

Yes, love or no love, alone in the end! Very interesting and sagely presented poetry.
You have a very talented pen and I always enjoy your work as it's a far reach from the norm yet so attainable!

Elizabeth

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Member Ascendant

since 1999-06-07

Posts 6871
Minnesota

7 posted 2001-08-20 12:53 PM

Very wise and true RS, and a good metaphor to use. Liked it!

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

8 posted 2001-08-20 02:56 PM

Have I mentioned you Texas guys sure can write?

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