Open Poetry #15 |
haiku? |
Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
Impressionistic aspen leaves tumble sun's shine and soften the breeze "As soon as the generals and the politicos can predict the motions of your mind, lose it." Wendell Berry [This message has been edited by Krawdad (edited 07-14-2001).] |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
krawdad, it's so good to see you here again this is the best haiku I've seen in quite awhile...so many end up being senyrus in truth I love this, every word of it...of course I'm no expert...I just know what I like "tumble" that is truly what aspen leaves do to the suns rays |
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Snow
since 2000-10-16
Posts 1170desert flower looking for rain |
often we get lost in perfecting the form, and forget about the content. in this case, both are excellent. snow "Trace my body with your words |
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pure_innocence Member
since 2001-07-14
Posts 80Colorado, US |
Light, breezy, warm, a breath of fresh air. Lovely voice, hope to hear it often. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
This is absolutely sunful! Loved it! |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Krawdad- Lovely image you've created here. Nicely done.. ~vicky "...until you have read the verse on his |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
yes..very nicely crafted to present an image in close focus... I enjoyed!! |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Yes, it is. And a darn good one at that |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
enjoyed |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
very nicely done...I can see the leaves |
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