»
Archives
»
Open Poetry #15
»
The Hallway
| Open Poetry #15 |
|
The Hallway |
|
|
JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
The Hallway (inspired by 1slick_lady’s ‘Just One of Those Things’) I recognize it now the hallway where time ago stood so many doors and I, dazed by the choices just anxious to enter any one without true thought to consequence lifted by luck, or by design the precise latch I remember it now door open a view of absolute tranquility and I, dazed by the odds of it broke from reality and spoke without true thought to consequence nullifying by carelessness, not to malign the hallway the door the dream I whisper now that I am sorry and love is finally silent |
||
| © Copyright 2001 JLR - All Rights Reserved | |||
|
shadow974 Senior Member
since 2001-06-21
Posts 636Michigan |
Well spoken with wise thought. Perhaps another chance. Throw your heart out in front of you |
||
|
SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~I recommend reading this one aloud. - From the structure, to the wording and intent,...wow. Received. *Peace. |
||
|
jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
I agree with friend Spitfire...aloud and...Wow! jwesley |
||
|
Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Oh baby girl...wow...dont give up darlin...love may be waiting beyond the next door |
||
|
1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
love is NEVER silent...it should scream from the roof...helen |
||
|
cpalmer Senior Member
since 2001-06-26
Posts 977Phoenix, Az |
JLR Love has a way of speaking at just the right time...take care Cindi |
||
|
JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
shadow974---Thank you for appreciating...it's not really meant to ask for another chance, only forgiveness. Spitfire---Coming from you...I am speechless. Because I think your writing is brilliant. Thank you. jwesley---Thank you for the image of you reading my words aloud. Very cool. Paula---Actually it was 'Three Doors Down'. Thanks for taking the time, Paula. helen---I agree...it should. The inspiration though was this: 'the hallway where you should have turned right but you went left' choices...and this: 'words and actions said in haste or never said or done at all that can never be erased' words spoken without true thought to consequence. It's really just an acknowledgement of responsibility for choices made and an apology for those that resulted in anothers pain. And finally: 'you just can’t get back over that burnt bridge' and it is from this position I now understand that love is best left silent...sometimes. If that is the only way it survives. Thanks for reading, helen and thank you for the inspiration of your poem. |
||
|
JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
cindi---thanks and yes, sometimes it does. [This message has been edited by JLR (edited 08-06-2001).] |
||
|
jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
very nice write....that hindsight thing can be very enlightening, but also painful |
||
|
walker Member Elite
since 2001-02-11
Posts 2240Florida |
We often make wrong choices, but we must forgive ourselves even when others don't. Beautiful poem, JLR. |
||
|
ParisGrl Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 610 |
R.J. Hey Woman! Long time, no talk.  I love this poem.......you should write me more often.Your Friend, Laura |
||
Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
A lot left behind to ponder...well done, JLR... |
||
|
Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
RJ, love always speaks. . . we just forget to listen sometimes. . .  great job. . . ----------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
||
|
|
⇧ top of page ⇧ |
|
| All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format. | ||
