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jellybeans
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since 2000-10-13

Posts 2298

0 posted 2001-08-03 02:32 PM

Silk lined and sturdy, it was ready-
I was all set to close the doors
to my past, I just needed to decide
what to pack...

First I folded all my painful memories
of my now too distant to talk to friend,
and carefully
soothed any remaining wrinkles
so that they
would be ready in case
sometime in the future, I might be
of a mind to air them.

Next, and it was four years to the day.
if I remember correctly, of the funeral
where they buried my hope
in the same six foot hole with my love,
I put in my grief.
But I packed it carefully
and made sure I could find it-
there will still be times I am sure
when I have need to get it out.

I was reticent to pack my anger.
Of all the things left from my past
it is the one I find most handy, though
I have tried to rid myself of it so often
that I know it thread for thread.
I once had intentions of mending,
but getting started was like going in circles,
I never found a beginning
or an ending.
I wasn't one to put away an item in tatters,
but my need to close the lid
got the best of me
and quickly I stuffed it
in a dark corner.

Lastly I laid in my need for love and
concern for tomorrow
and then on top of that
my paper and my pen
and closed tight the lid.
All was well, the sun
was still rising and setting
and I
was doing just fine
thank you very much.

Until today, that is, until this unexpected
kiss. Your lips touched mine
and slipped deep inside.
You unfolded everything I have
and have not missed.

Lady In White

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since 2001-02-12

Posts 2799
USA

1 posted 2001-08-03 02:34 PM

This....is a good write! Thanks for sharing....

jellybeans
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since 2000-10-13

Posts 2298

2 posted 2001-08-03 02:39 PM

thank you lady...my muse was quiet for so long I was almost resigned to the silence, but she turned over a new leaf and now she keeps me hopping or is that typing

Interloper

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since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

3 posted 2001-08-03 02:40 PM

Wow! Lotsa mixed emotions now ... I gotta tell ya I truly loved this piece

http://members.home.net/excalibur2501/Interloper.htm

Cpat Hair

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since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

4 posted 2001-08-03 02:42 PM

Gonna say I agree with Interloper on this one..his comment just about said it all...

jellybeans
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since 2000-10-13

Posts 2298

5 posted 2001-08-03 02:53 PM

thank you both....sigh....yep lots of emotions went into the writing also...glad they come across to the reader

1slick_lady
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since 2000-12-22

Posts 6088
standing on a shadow's lace

6 posted 2001-08-03 02:57 PM

JB...you write so intense...you bring tears...

"You unfolded everything I have
and have not missed"

powerful...helen

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

7 posted 2001-08-03 03:41 PM

JellyBeans~
Oh my ! This stirs me to the core.
Just exquisitely said~

Glad that quill is busy !
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
[email protected]

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

8 posted 2001-08-03 07:05 PM

jellybeans--

"Lastly I laid in my need for love and
concern for tomorrow
and then on top of that
my paper and my pen
and closed tight the lid."

You were smart to pack your paper and pen last, 'cause I really like the way you write!

Gentle Spirit
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since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

9 posted 2001-08-03 07:06 PM

Wow, very powerful and impressive writing JB. You packed well!!

On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free.
~Me~

(I could have missed the pain, but I'd have had to miss the dance~Garth)

Krawdad
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since 2001-01-03

Posts 2597

10 posted 2001-08-04 12:01 PM

Jelly,

Well done!
Really like the way you've presented this . . . the lamenting set-up for the killer last verse.

"As soon as the generals and the politicos can predict the motions of your mind, lose it." Wendell Berry

Balladeer

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since 1999-06-05

Posts 25505
Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA

11 posted 2001-08-04 12:09 PM

hopping or typing....you in action is awesome

Constance
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since 2001-07-28

Posts 393
Ohio

12 posted 2001-08-04 02:19 AM

jellybeans-this took my breath away. I like everything about it. Really spoke to my heart.

Irish Rose
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since 2000-04-06

Posts 10263

13 posted 2001-08-04 10:21 PM

I like this...yes, I like this very much..thank you for this one.

" I walked beside the evening sea And dreamed a dream that could not be" George William Curtis"

Kay

Bill Charles
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since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

14 posted 2001-08-05 10:22 AM

jellybeans - I am so glad that I came by to read your writing this morning. One touching poem you have done...

BC

catalinamoon

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

15 posted 2001-08-05 09:05 PM

Like this a lot. Very strong poem.
Sandra

shadow974
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since 2001-06-21

Posts 636
Michigan

16 posted 2001-08-05 09:12 PM

You Penned a great one there, so much feeling all wrapped up, until.

Throw your heart out in front of you
And run out to catch it.

jellybeans
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since 2000-10-13

Posts 2298

17 posted 2001-08-06 02:10 PM

1slick lady, Marge, Martie, Gentle Spirit, Krawdad, Balladeer, Constance, Irish Rose, Bill, Catalina, Shawdow974, thank you so much...I wish I had more time to type a longer response but am working my lunch hour...if my words touch you half as much as your responses do me...well then we are both lucky....thank you all again so much

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