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Decaflame
Senior Member

since 2001-05-11

Posts 1635

0 posted 2001-08-02 09:19 AM

                            timing

                            a bit of
                            beat
                            a sense of
                            drum

                            a blood’s
                            course
                            channeling
                            force

                            all in
                            timing

                            meet of
                            bat
                            against the
                            ball

                            spirit’s
                            sensed
                            in hallowed
                            halls

                            all in
                            timing

                            caress of
                            lip
                            neath
                            fingertip

                            meet of
                            I
                            in your
                            eye

                            all in
                            timing

                            a bit of
                            beat
                            a sense of
                            drum

                            timing

                            now

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

1 posted 2001-08-02 09:22 AM

nice... and yes it is all in the timing...

but for a minutes loss or gain
who knows what change..

I enjoyed

Rick
Member Elite

since 2001-06-21

Posts 2903
Victoria, Australia

2 posted 2001-08-02 09:29 AM

All in timing it is true, it makes the sweetness true, a catchy piece indeed it is, that we've received from you.
Well done, awaiting more.

Rick

Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean

since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

3 posted 2001-08-02 09:50 AM

Decaflame,
Just whipe your nose on your sleeve
You don't need timming. LOL PS. nice write.

Interloper

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

4 posted 2001-08-02 09:57 AM

You are "top dead center."

http://members.home.net/excalibur2501/Interloper.htm

Honeybee
Member Ascendant

since 1999-12-26

Posts 5372
Ontario, CANADA

5 posted 2001-08-02 11:39 AM

Excellent rhythm and rhyme in this, I like the thought, I see your poem as paying homage to fate's time and what's meant to be

Melissa~

Logan
Senior Member

since 2001-05-28

Posts 1641
Arkansas

6 posted 2001-08-02 04:53 PM

Isn't it always a matter of timing? Would we take this or that path instead of the one we did, if other events have been in time? Very good thoughts raised from you..in your own excellent style...very gentle smile

catalinamoon

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

7 posted 2001-08-02 06:27 PM

Yes, too true, isn't it, timing is so very important in the outcome.
Nice write
Sandra

Nan

Administrator

Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-20

Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

8 posted 2001-08-03 08:26 AM

It surely is all in the timing - I particularly like the finale though "NOW"...

Auguste

Member Elite

since 2000-02-16

Posts 3953
By the sea

9 posted 2001-08-03 02:02 PM

yes, it's all in timing and you'll done well in expressing just that. Thanks!

Michael

Michael Auguste~
There is more depth to the heart than the mind can comprehend and it only has boundaries when we choose to fence it in.

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

10 posted 2001-08-06 05:32 PM

Decaflame-
   I love the rhythm and flow of this..
   Very nicely done...and so very true.

   hugs,
   ~vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his
heart, you have not truely met the poet."
-vlraynes

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