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The Seeker
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The Seeker |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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The Seeker The needle of her word sews cloth I sometimes mix and take as broth But never can I catch the light That overcomes me in the night. The phantom of my fantasy Her condiment of ecstasy The road and rainbows treasured goal The pools of love within my soul I’m taken on the wind to sea Follow those stars that sing to me Ever is my souls endeavor Blindly do I search forever? Be it here or a ghostly dim Eternity will be my whim I will not stop until I find The magic that is in my mind With wings sown within this rhyme I'll searh o'er eternities time. [This message has been edited by Seymour Tabin (edited 07-30-2001).] |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
Sounds like one of those dreams that doesn't dissipate with daylight. Enjoyed. "Oh what a tangled web we weave when first we practice to decieve" |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
"Seek and ye shall find"... You always take us on a wonderful journey with your sweet words, Sy...  |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
"blindly do I reach forever..." I certainly hope you never stop reaching...whether blind, or guided by another hand, or in full light... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
quote: YA GOT THAT RIGHT!!!  I’m taken on the wind to sea Follow those stars that sing to me Ever is my souls endeavor Blindly do I search forever? Be it here or a ghostly dim Eternity will be my whim I will not stop until I find The magic that is in my mind And take the journey in this rhyme And journey into future time. ================================= sounds like a sail into serenity to me *winkiewinkie*  me slow burn ... |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
nicely done Seymour...enjoyed the message.. and the form.. |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
I really like this, the message, the flow, the feel of it is electric. To me, though, and I seem to be alone so put this where ever you want it, the last two lines detract from the power of the whole. I don't know if it's purely because of the use of the word journey twice in such proximity or not, but I'm guessing that's it. I especially like the lines about the light in the night!!!!! |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
This more or less describes what I refer to as "pursuing the horizon". We each have a tantilizing quest, and it is the process of the search which brings fulfillment. -MVS "When you tell the Truth, you never have to remember what you just said." |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
RSWells, Yes it is and thank you. Nan' What else would I send to your sweet ear Sunshine, I'll look as long as you shine. JM, With you it would be a delight. WW S Cpat Hair, Thank you for the read and comment VAS, OK I changed the last two lines. Mark, Yes I would call it that too. |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
I will not stop until I find The magic that is in my mind How wonderfully put. This sings. Tracey If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
On the eternal quest . . . Pretty much self explained. Nice lilt to this, S.T. |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Mysterious and full of life's lessons at once. Cor |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Tracey, Krawdad and Corinne, I thank you much for all your sweet touch. |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
*sigh*  What can I say that I haven't said before about your writing, Sy? I always love it!  Don't gain my affections then cover my eyes. Don't sweep me off my feet then fail to catch me before I hit the floor. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Temptress, I think you said it all. *L* |
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