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Poet Unknown
Member

since 2001-08-14

Posts 140
Missouri

0 posted 2001-08-27 08:27 PM

Waiting for the day to begin,
Cause it's now or never, never again.
Anticipating the moment you walk in,
Like a mad man Frozen in sin.
A ray of light surrounds you,
Thinking of you and what to do.
All the while figuring this out,
Hearing my name in a distant shout.
Turn and smile as our eyes meet,
Walking hand in hand on the corner street.
Guiding you down to the corner store,
The one that sits right next to the shore.
Taking you down to the resturaunt for breakfast,
Overlooking the sea in the moment of everlast.
Walking further down the road to a nice little shop,
Buy you something that can't exactly hop.
Thinking of that diomand necklace and frog,
Shines so bright you can see it through the fog.
This is when your eyes shine brighter,
You start to feel a little lighter.
And then appears your angelic essance,
Smiling cause there's an angel in my presence.
And in case you were wondering,
No it isn't thundering.
That's my heart,
You've had it from the start.

Only darkness falls on those without souls

cherish
Senior Member

since 2001-03-25

Posts 1639
swimming in fairy floss...........

1 posted 2001-08-27 10:32 PM

Like a mad man Frozen in sin

aw this is sooooo cool!!..i loved this one..its the first ive read of yours and i thought it was brilliant! well done on this PU!!

Piece you life together and you WILL find holes.

HopelessRomanticGuy
Member

since 2001-08-17

Posts 495
LI, New York

2 posted 2001-08-27 11:40 PM

Ahhh.....I like the emotion put into this poem, and I LOVED the ending, I thought it was great, this one is going in my library. Hope to see many more great works.

Love will come and love will go, but friends are forever (usually).

xShUgArHiGhx

Member Elite

since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

3 posted 2001-08-28 12:52 PM

Hehehe i enjoyed this one!!!! great job here

WOoooooonnnnnnndddddddeeeeerrrrrrfuuuuuuulllll

allie
Member

since 2001-07-09

Posts 218
Australia

4 posted 2001-08-28 07:48 AM

wow... i really loved the ending firstly... but the rhyme reminded me of innocent love, which made me smile... There's nothing like romance! Very very sweet and makes me wish i were in love lol

ALLIE

Poet Unknown
Member

since 2001-08-14

Posts 140
Missouri

5 posted 2001-08-28 12:44 PM

well thanks for the support guys i appreciate it

Only darkness falls on those without souls

Spice
Senior Member

since 2001-04-13

Posts 1266
Resting in my cardboard box.

6 posted 2001-09-01 02:19 PM

I'm with Allie, I thought of "innocent love" myself. Very sweet.
Loved the ending as well.
Hope to see more.

You wouldn't worry about what people thought about you if you knew how seldom they did.

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