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Crash&Burn
Member

since 2001-01-18

Posts 119

0 posted 2001-08-18 05:27 PM

Cruel World:

Strolling through a garden of children,
inadequated positioning,
floating in an empty pool,
with the cold wind that dries my body.
I shed tears of blood,
and then walked forward, naked
with a cloudy world around me
and suddenly a crowd surrounds me.
Thought a moment's relief,
becomes anothers betrayal;
because all these bodies have blank faces
and none will embrace me,
so I stand alone and naked
in this cruel world;
waste rains on me
and I have nowhere to go.

I see the darkness coming all is bleak...

DarkAngelOfTheStars
Member

since 2001-04-21

Posts 255

1 posted 2001-08-18 06:15 PM

nice poem, ive felt like that before...hope everything is ok

You know you 've completely descended into madness when the matter of shampoo has ascended to philosophical heights

TopGunLauren
Senior Member

since 2000-08-02

Posts 718
California

2 posted 2001-08-19 04:17 PM

I've felt like that a lot and I hope everything gets better for you.Keep up the awsome work I loved this poem.
Lauren

Spice
Senior Member

since 2001-04-13

Posts 1266
Resting in my cardboard box.

3 posted 2001-08-19 10:20 PM

All the poems I see from you are so bummed out and sad...Hope all is okay. (Then I see the fart smiley and no that there is SOMETHing happy going on there. LOL) Nice write here. Not my fav of yours...But much liked as always. You captured your feelings very well. Hope to see another soon.

You wouldn't worry about what people thought about you if you knew how seldom they did.

Fading Away

Member Elite

since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

4 posted 2001-08-21 12:16 PM

This is so sad... I hope all is well? You seem like you're going through very trying times. *hug* I enjoyed this poem. You put lots of emotion into it. Nicely done..
If you need someone to talk to, don't hesitate to email me

Well done.

--Marie

If going to church makes you a Christian, then sitting in a garage makes you a car.

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

5 posted 2001-08-26 02:55 AM

I really enjoyed this jorge, but what's up man? I heard the news....gotta give me details pal. Nice poem though.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

allie
Member

since 2001-07-09

Posts 218
Australia

6 posted 2001-08-26 05:21 AM

This is so depressing?

Thought a moment's relief,
becomes anothers betrayal;

Woa... i hope everythings ok!!

Nice poem but soooo sad,

ALLIE

Crash&Burn
Member

since 2001-01-18

Posts 119

7 posted 2001-08-28 07:19 PM

we all have our moment's. I once heard life is like a roller coster full of it's ups and downs. Although most would argue I believe life IS mostly downs, but the ups are so good they always make up for it, not only that but it is the downs that actually have more efect on us and shape us more into the person to whom we eventually become.
"All is great, all is wondered let life go as days go unravelled"

I see the darkness coming all is bleak...

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