Teen Poetry #5 |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada ![]() |
The night was coming to an end, Rays of sunlight were showing. Not a bird was sing to praise the moon. The land was covered by the veil of death, Man made death, man the creator, Man the good. Death was everywhere, seeking victims NIght came, but the stars never appeared. The night left for the morn. The sun never rose again, A blue haze of death blotted the sun. The birds died, flowers did not bloom, A new creature appeared. One with a long nose, two disks for eyes A hole for a mouth, with skin as yellow as parchment Never more did the bird sing the praise to the moon. Regina If you only understood my pain then maybe you could learn to be my friend. Be there. My crying shoulder. The smiles. And the caring i need to survive. |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
Another good one. I really like this series Regina. Jon "Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine |
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LoneWolf Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 384IL |
I really liked this one, i though it was really good. great work here. It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that. |
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since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Awesome images throughout this one... "Death was everywhere, seeking victims NIght came, but the stars never appeared." Those were definitely my fav lines. Awesome work, Regi. I enjoyed this one... very sullen tone, though... sad poem. Nicely done! On to the next... ![]() --Marie You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning. |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
As already said, you do have a way with images. You're such an impressive writer Keep it up Ina keep sharing too hi Sweets, Lizzy, Kris, Ina, Allysa, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Ma |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
One with a long nose, two disks for eyes A hole for a mouth, with skin as yellow as parchment Never more did the bird sing the praise to the moon. this is a great write from you regi. i enjoyed it heaps!..well done! ![]() ![]() ![]() Piece you life together and you WILL find holes. |
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
A very good write here Regi! I liked this a lot. Very impressive. ![]() I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Great descriptions of the sun here, Regina. You go into it deep enough to give us a pretty good understanding and paint some wonderful images with these words of yours. I really like this one. Library material. ![]() ~AF~ "Kelly's my Hero!" "No, Kelly's your heroine." "Kelly has heroin??" "What?" |
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anonymous albert ?![]()
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
great imagery and need i say more about the discription withing this?...i liked it muchies. if i die before i wake...i pray the Lord my soul to take - when thugs cry- |
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