Teen Poetry #5 |
Secondhand Opinion |
Allysa
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
I say you could never stand to be near me. You say you simply didn't want to scare me off. Everytime we were together you stood two feet away. You were supposed to be my boyfriend. I say you have a secondhand opinion. You ask me what that is and why I feel that way. You let everyone else's opinions influence your own. You'll never see who I really am if you don't open your eyes. It's true that you could never stand to be near me. You would never hold my hand when we were together. Let alone actually hug or kiss me ever. I have no memory of that at all. Just a memory of being lonely. You have a secondhand opinion of just me. You let what they say take an influence over what you think. Close your eyes and take my hand and let me lead the way. You might be surprised the next time you open your eyes. You won't let me get in the way of anything. ANd every time you turn around there I am. It's like I follow you around everywhere you go. I just want you to learn what it's like to live the otherside of the story. You've got a secondhand opinion about the way I live life. You let what they say about me influence your decisions. They're the reason you won't love me anymore. Open your eyes and see who I really am. Someone once taught me that it doesn't matter what other people think of you as long as you like yourself. That's what I live by. |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
Great work again. keep writing. this was also very sad, tore a bit at my heart. Regina |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
I liked this one. It was so sad, but I could relate so much. I had a girlfriend who broke up with me cause of secondhand opinions, it's so jacked they don't even see you for the real person. To hell with those people, even though I still have feelings for mine, but I'm ignorant so... Jon "Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine |
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Allysa
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
I'm ignorant too then. I still love mine. He's been informed otherwise, but oh well. Someone once taught me that it doesn't matter what other people think of you as long as you like yourself. That's what I live by. |
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Ski*Chick Member
since 2001-01-13
Posts 141Fitchburg, Mass, Usa |
Allysa that was a nice poem I liked it, it was cute Min Some people come into our lives and go quickly. Some people stay for awhile and leave footprints on our hearts. We are never ever the same. |
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silvrduck Member
since 2000-11-05
Posts 146 |
That's terrible.. the situation i mean! The poem is wonderful. I'm so sorry this happened to you though. Some people are just too blind and concerned with what other people think.. and end up missing out on amazing things.. I hope things get better for you.. keep up the great work! Sarah *love is blind; friendship closes its eyes.* |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
ugh what a so and so. Do you want me to beat him up?? This is a really crappy situation and I feel for you. At least you have done what so many chicks are unable to do - REALISE that he's doing this to you. It would take a lot of strength to know that someone is doing this to you and standing up to them. The piece itself was really sad. Like I said, do you want me to beat him up 'cause I'll fly over there to do so just for you..hehe Keep your head up and make sure you keep posting/replying. ~AF~ I'm a little teapot, short and stout! Here is my handle, here is my spout. *toot toot* |
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Allysa
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
Come over here and we can beat him up together! We can kidnap him, duct tape him to the floor, wait for him to fall asleep, and then tell him the house is on fire and hear him scream! Okay, so I'm psyco. Anyways, I've got other guys and such, so I guess it's over. I don't want him if it's gonna be like that. The person I fell in love with and him are two totally different people. Someone once taught me that it doesn't matter what other people think of you as long as you like yourself. That's what I live by. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Add me in on that little plan... grr, things like this make me so angry. I think you wrote about it very well... and as EJ said, you did something MANY others wouldn't be able to in the same situation... you realized things weren't right, and got tough. Nicely done, Allysa. I enjoyed this. --Marie If going to church makes you a Christian, then sitting in a garage makes you a car. |
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TopGunLauren Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 718California |
Sad poem but I could relate to it but I hope things get better for you because I know how much it sucks.Keep up the awsome work! Lauren |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
OK, so who's your man now Allysa? spill hi Sweets, Lizzy, Kris, Ina, Allysa, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Ma |
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Alyssa
since 2001-05-30
Posts 385IM ENGAGED!!!!! |
nice piece sis... "I swear officer! It was PINK." |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
This is such a horrible situation to be in...i hate it when people cant think for themselfes and they let others influence them...i think you'd be a lot happier w/out him but thats always easier said then done! |
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Allysa
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
My man now is.....Creamy Goodness, and AJ. You've heard me mention AJ before, we're emailing each other back and forth, and it's cool. He's such a sweetheart. I feel special. I have no idea how him and Justin are even friends. They're completly different. AJ's personality is like Justin's old personality. Sugarpie313 married my poem! (that's my poem, not your poem! pooh!) |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
I told ya to go with the one who'd make you feel like a pryncess hi Sweets, Lizzy, Kris, Ina, Allysa, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Ma |
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punkrockerrobin
since 2001-05-15
Posts 1180Sparks, NV |
great poem very well written. robin bye lizzy,javi,acire,cherish,SEA,vicky,laura,andrea,jessa and anyone else i forgot i will be back to torment you soon muhahahahahahaha |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
OK I just booked a flight. lol "Hi there, can I relay a sonnet your way?" |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Very well done here. I can't believe it took me this long to read it. I liked it a lot. I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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