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Teen Poetry #5

Spiting something out?!

ryun
Junior Member

since 2000-01-25

Posts 33
elsinore, ca, usa

0 posted 2001-08-13 11:29 PM

Falling clear of all my fears
on an ocean of misery
floating down on the boat
of passionate perplexities
livin life in the gray areas
wher no one's ever gonna here ya..

im a hopless romantic
waiting for my tragic end
so far away from
yet close in my heart
tearing me apart
my love in side for one
unable to hide
busting out it shines
in the darkness
illuminated my love trys..

keoni
Senior Member

since 2000-10-16

Posts 850
Up in the mountains in the NFC

1 posted 2001-08-14 02:26 PM

I liked this one. The first stanza was really cool
Jon

"Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine
"Only God can judge me" Tupac Shakur

Fading Away

Member Elite

since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

2 posted 2001-08-14 04:59 PM

Powerful poem in it's simplicity. I enjoyed this. The second stanza was pretty cool... very nice work, Ryun!
Remember, just a reminder... you can't post more than 3 a day

I hope this is the last for today.
Nicely done, here.

--Marie

You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning.

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