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An Autumn Morning
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An Autumn Morning |
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chasing rain Senior Member
since 2001-05-15
Posts 737Canada |
As the sun climbs over the eastern shadow. Purples and pinks streak the morning sky With freshly fallen dew upon the silky grass. In the distance, the geese roam the sky Their wings beat the the song of flight. And I... I listen within the tranquil peace of liberty. I walk down the concrete sidewalk Amidst the blowing wind. People stir and awaken to a new day And the noise begins. I enter the cafe Already open And order a latte Milky in all its caffinated splendor. As I sit, I gaze at the wall Sunlit shadows cut through And burst into open flame And lights the cafe Within its own light. I sigh and sip the latte Glad that no one else is there To disturb my peace. At the last drop I throw my cup into the garbage And leave to walk down A busier street. I pass by all others Oblivious to their breathing. They are but a blur to me. And so by that path, I reach a meadow And a lay upon the grass Still wet with morning dew And I look up and reach Far above the clouds Thousands of miles of atmosphere between us And fall into a deep slumber... Dreaming of the night to come. ===== Where in the world did THAT come from? I believe there may be a night poem that follows...? Perhaps. Until then, farewell. I will be back to give my two cents out. MUAHAHAHAHAAAA!!! *silence* >.< doh. -Leah Va pensiero sull' ali dorate... [This message has been edited by chasing rain (edited 08-10-2001).] |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
WHAT!?!?! DAY TIME?!?! This is HIGHLY unlike you... *Checks your temp.* HaHa Actually, I'm glad you wrote about the day. Very awesome. It made me smile the whole way through. Such wonderfully imagery.I loved this! (MAde me really want a cappuccino too.) Hope to see another very soon. (Or else! Muwaha) You wouldn't worry about what people thought about you if you knew how seldom they did. |
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katherine Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Canberra Australia |
thios is fantastic. really well done i really loved.... "Sunlit shadows cut through And burst into open flame" katie "by takeing no risks you are really risking everything" |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Oh, this is marvelously written! You had a lot of very neat themes in here. I really liked the liquid imagery theme you developed (latte, milky, silky, dew, etc). It set the texture, scents and sights to be incredibly pleasant. You are a very talented young lady. This is SUCH a professional poem. Yours, ~Allan The children of the nobility are playing here. they look up at you with disgust as you come near. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Again, you've pulled off a wonderfully written poem, Leah. The beginning was my favorite.. the first few lines paved the way to an absolutely wonderful poem. Nicely done! I look forward to the next... --Marie You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning. |
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DarkAngelOfTheStars Member
since 2001-04-21
Posts 255 |
great poem i really liked it  You know you 've completely descended into madness when the matter of shampoo has ascended to philosophical heights |
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XFalloutX Junior Member
since 2001-05-13
Posts 31NC |
A latte....thats all you need...:P:P:P:P:P:P:P:P:P:P ha-HA!!!!!!!ummmm....ok I'll leave now |
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mistic Member
since 2001-05-06
Posts 233Idaho, U.S.A. |
awesome awesome imagery here... I think you seriously tantalized everyone's senses with this one. Life is an open book with many unwritten pages, write something that's meaningful to you there. |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
ok..no need to tell you that i thoroughly enjoyed this poem leah...you know i enjoy all your poetry!..i just couldnt pass this by without clicking onto the library thing! GREAT read...and there MUST be a night poem! period pain is HELL! |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I thought you wrote this really beautifully. Great job here!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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fozzyozzy Member
since 2001-03-15
Posts 336Lessburg Virginia |
Coffee again. I'm noticing a pattern. Anywho. I could most definately see the picture. Good job on that. The beginning really drew me in. Like Allan said, very professional. Thanks for the read. "and Death i think is no paranthesis"-e.e. cummings |
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Android 17
since 2001-07-21
Posts 664Winnipeg |
Huh?! Leah...I can't picture you waking up THAT early? AAAAH! LEAH'S SICK!!! Lol, that was well done...as always! *snaps fingers* This poem sounded...I dunno, it made me feel peaceful! It kinda reminds me of when I goto Starbucks at like 6:00am! *sigh* Memories! ~ Alex You're a speck in the universe, not even worth noticing...Yet, somehow you matter so much to others! [This message has been edited by Android 17 (edited 09-04-2001).] |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Ooo...Leah!!  This is great but not totally outstanding like the other one I just read. The feel it has to it is really...umm...trying to find a word for it. Oh! It's really calm. Bad word I know but hey!  Nice images in it as well with the staggered lines. Good job Leah. You're just too talented. ~AF~ "Kelly's my Hero!" "No, Kelly's your heroine." "Kelly has heroin??" "What?" |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
LEAH this is..sOoo written. VERY ugly!..  ...HaHa...seriously though...you sure got that talent up your sleeves...dont ya? ...you written a piece that blends so well everyday life with the human nature that surrounds...i can see emotions floating as well ...loved the read...buh bye  if i die before i wake...i pray the Lord my soul to take - when thugs cry- |
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