Teen Poetry #5 |
Boy So Lonely (repost from TP#4 and #1 of a 2-part 'series') |
CwboyAtHeart Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 541Selah, WA, USA |
This is one that was in TP#4 that I just rediscovered in my "archives." lol Well, It was probably one of the best pieces I have written, so I decided I'd write a companion for it. Anyway, let me know what you think of this, and don't forget to read its companion, "Boy No Longer Lonely" BOY SO LONELY He's the kid that You always pass by He always seems to be sad And you don't know why He's the one that Always feels so blue Nobody ever bothers to say hi The boy nobody ever knew The one that nobody liked Though they never even tried Nobody was there to hold him All those nights that he cried He's the one that's in the corner Trying to keep away from the crowd He was only his own best friend Close friends he was not endowed The boy that noone likes Has commited suicide... Maybe if someone loved him He may not have died His mother and father Visited him only Soon their lives moved on And he was left a boy so lonely - Cody - |
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Linc
since 2001-03-07
Posts 552The Backstreet Boy |
Hey, Wow, this is a really nice piece sad though very sad. It’s a shame that some people have to go through childhoods and even there whole lives like that. Kind of describes the type of world we are trapped in doesn’t it. Well anyways this is a really nice poem and I am going to read the counterpart now so until your next poem -- Linc "Blood Moon" |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Aww... this is really sad. The emotions throughout this piece are very strong. I really enjoyed the way you wrote this, and the way the whole story played out. Nicely done, Cody! I really enjoued this. On to #2! --Marie You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning. |
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TopGunLauren Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 718California |
Wow this poem is really sad but is so true because I'm sure htere is a person like the one you described in every school.Maybe next time people walk by someone like you described they will take a minute and at least say hi.But anyway I really like this poem and it made me think keep up the awsome work! Lauren |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I really loved the poem here. Awesome job! Man this was just great. I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Jezziekaka Member
since 2001-08-21
Posts 58where the trees touch the sky |
Wow! I think that alot of things could be prevented if every boy and girl got some love! I liked this alot! Da kaka be dangerous, unpredictable, and make a lot of noise! |
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