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punkrockerrobin 
since 2001-05-15
Posts 1180Sparks, NV 
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i've lost you and another, i can't go on my heart can't take it. i loved you dearly now you're gone. i pray for god to take me, so then i will be with you. but i know that is not right, so i just pray, i pray with anger. anger that has come from your death. i try to hold it back but it's to strong i let it out. what have i become? i know now what i didn't know then about you. i knew you loved me and you wouldn't want me this way. so i pray. i pray till the sun comes up. i know it's weird but i feel you. i feel your hand on my shoulder. i hear your voice sayin "i love you!" come back to me i need you now more than ever. i hear the voice again "i love you" i'm not afraid now for i know you are with me, and will never leave me. tiff this poem is for you. just hear his voice. he will be there for you. no matter what! and you know i'm always here for ya. keep that chin up girly! i love ya! robin i don't give up without a fight so boys beware! |
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allie Member
since 2001-07-09
Posts 218Australia |
woa, this muct be really awful for you... It's so awful when someone close to you dies. And I'm not going to pretend i know all about it... All i can say is im terribly sorry and I'd love it if someone wrote something like that for me... ALLIE |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
You did this well. This is something you've never done before.....you've never really written a poem like this. I think you should do it more often. It came off well. As for the situation, sounds rotten. I hope all is well with tiff.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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sean mani Junior Member
since 2001-08-06
Posts 27 |
really interesting to read...ur poem is good sean |
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punkrockerrobin
since 2001-05-15
Posts 1180Sparks, NV |
you really think so javi? well i dunno i can try. tks pplz for your kind words hehe ya really liked it? robin i don't give up without a fight so boys beware! |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
I agree with Javi. This is different from your usual writing... I really liked this one. You should try this more often, the finished product was impressive! --Marie You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning. |
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the_rescue Member
since 2001-05-23
Posts 316Japan |
nice robin good stuff and no I haven't been on recently and I probably wont be on much at all anymore too much going on. Talk to you later. KKTD we fall like the stars then rise like the sun..Repentence.Forgiveness.We are blame worthy hold us to our wrongs..but don't hold our wrongs against us |
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bOoGaSuGa Member
since 2001-08-03
Posts 54 |
i think this is ur best work yet robin! *knows what ur goin through* |
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knightlyshadows Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791obscured vision |
thank you robin. i apprectiate this very much and it means alot to me. im glad to have a friend like you altough we dont talk much. *hugs* tiff Blood Moon |
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punkrockerrobin
since 2001-05-15
Posts 1180Sparks, NV |
tiff i care a lot bout my friends and you are one of them i know wht it's like to loose someone you love. robin i don't give up without a fight so boys beware! |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
The way I first read it it sounded like Tiff died...  but nah, great poem. *hugs to tiffer* I love that girl~Carly Speak softly and carry a beagle. |
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