»
Archives
»
Teen Poetry #5
»
cruel evil people
| Teen Poetry #5 |
|
cruel evil people |
|
|
thedarkangel Member
since 2001-05-12
Posts 74~*~the cutest~*~ |
~*~btw this is about some really mean people that say i'm not pretty... and last night it really got me down. so i wrote....~*~ i'm sorry they think i'm ugly i'm sorry that i'm not cool i'm sorry for any embarasment you suffer i'm sorry that they're so cruel i'm sorry josie was mean to you i'm sorry you have to stand up for me i'm sorry you have no peace i'm sorry they won't let you be free i'm sorry i can't be with you i'm sorry we're so far apart i'm sorry i can't defend myself i'm sorry they hurt your heart but hang on.... why should i be sorry?... I'm totally not sorry for.... Thinking the world of you and helping you fly free, cussing all those people in my head and being PROUD TO BE ME! The road ahead is as long as you make it. Make it worth the trip ~*~jon bon jovi~*~ |
||
| © Copyright 2001 laura - All Rights Reserved | |||
Heavens Tears
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677 |
I'm sorry this is happening to you, but remember, dont change yourself just for someone else. The flow of the poem was fine, and I really enjoyed it. *Amanda* |
||
|
TearsOfPearls Member
since 1999-09-23
Posts 322Vereeniging, South-Africa |
Wow, I loved this poem, this actually happened to me too, only in a different way, hehe, but you hang in there and remember you don't have to change for no one. Excellent poem! Planning big can be a gamble...I have already rolled the dice! |
||
|
angel_2401 Member
since 2001-06-12
Posts 131Cincinnati, OH |
Aw..... *hugs* I get that a lot. Your poem expresses feelings, and really well. I like the way it's written. Keep you head up and Keep smiling!  I don't have an attitude problem You have a perception problem. |
||
|
FoxXena Member
since 2001-06-13
Posts 141where dragons play, children run free and foxes are never hunted |
I can totally relate. I was made fun of in grade school because I was different than others. I then realized that its okay to be who you are. ~*~It is said that laughter is the shortest distance between two people...~*~ ~*~I say it is the written word.~*~ [This message has been edited by FoxXena (edited 06-28-2001).] |
||
|
obscurity of cloud Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 294....:::::******:::::.... |
good work. you've chosen a topic very close to just about everyone. the sort of caesura formed by the line before the last stanza threw me off a little, but your overall work is great! "so when at times the mob is swayed to carry praise or blame too far, we may choose something like a star" --Frost |
||
|
Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
I really enjoyed this. As I was reading down, about the third stanza, I started to think "Why should she be sorry for all this? None of these things are things that she could prevent from happening in any way." I was pleased to see: "but hang on.... why should i be sorry?..." Nice work, here. I liked this a lot. --Marie You can’t expect the roses to grow without the weeds. |
||
|
TopGunLauren Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 718California |
Don't let what other people say effect you becauwe then your letting them win.As long as you feel comfortable with yourself that's all that matter.But anyway this is such a beautiful poem keep up the awsome work. Lauren |
||
|
TunaKaHuna Junior Member
since 2001-06-28
Posts 19United States |
Wow, this poem really states just how much you care about what people think, yet wont take any of the cruel intensions a lot of people give...Great poem, hang in there, and keep strong. |
||
|
anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
..well done...true and harsh reality...and you said it powerfull at the end...i liked it...bye..  [This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 06-29-2001).] |
||
|
anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
If someone tells you that you're not pretty, tell them not so politely to get lost. You don't need that sort of crap. I really like your ending for this. It shows that you came through and are actually proud to be yourself. Poems with positive emotions in the ending are always better to read. Thanks for sharing this. ~AF~ Just because I hear voices doesn't mean I'm crazy...SHUT UP IN THERE!!! |
||
|
Dopey Dope
Moderator
Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Very positive ending. Shows just how proud you are to be you and that is something to admire in these times. Not many people can say the same. So kudos to you on that. Very nice poem here.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
||
|
Acies
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Godd for you. Be strong and never let anyone put you down. Just laugh at thm for when they do such a thing, that already means that they are lower than you are. Keep your head up hi Sweets, Kris, Lizzy, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Mare |
||
|
fearing-laughter Senior Member
since 2001-04-24
Posts 605land of cheese (Wisconsin) |
good poem, ah ignore other people. ten years from now you won't even remember who they are. they'll be severly ugly lol. thanks for sharing, and be strong. -fear- i'm a penguin! i'm a penguin! i'm a cute lil penguiiiin! i'm a penguin i'm a penguin! i eat FISH!--tis the pretty penguin song |
||
|
Kicking Kim Member
since 2001-04-16
Posts 426Cloud Cucko Land! |
Wow this is an incredible poem and I too am sorry this is happening to you. Great poem however, very wtrong ans well structured!  ^*~Kicking Kim~*^ "Theres no posession, just obsession and growing depression" |
||
|
cutiepiesugarbabie Member
since 2002-06-07
Posts 110A Cloud In the Sky |
wow-totally awesome! it takes a lot to feel good in the end after insults are throw, i know it always gets me down, espeacially when people are supposed to be ur friends but n e wayz great poem! |
||
|
lone_poet707 Member
since 2001-11-17
Posts 70black hole named Aylmer |
wow, been so long since ive been here.....but anywho, the poem. Its excellent! There are so many ppl who can/will relate to what you feel right now, myself included. Never change yourself to satisfy someone else. You are who you are and if that not good enough for them, they arent worth your time or effort. |
||
|
blakloks Member
since 2002-06-01
Posts 60 |
this is sho close to heart, not juz for me but i think also for many people. dun let life get u down ~hugs~ ... i liked the flow of the poem. when pple are pained the words come out better. hope u feel better now u've written about it. i almost always feel better |
||
Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
NEVER be proud to be you. You've gotta be your number one fan! |
||
|
|
⇧ top of page ⇧ |
|
| All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format. | ||
