Teen Poetry #5 |
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Leilani (i dont expect many replies...but it was on my heart) |
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SlowDrag Member
since 2002-01-10
Posts 53Tx...need i say more |
well....this is what was on my mind when i picked up my guitar tonight...hope you enjoy (i hope she enjoys haha)...man...you know...ever had that feeling...when the perfect girl was right under your nose for years?? and you just slowly come to realize she's everything you want in a girl?? sometimes she cries... and i never know why sometimes she hides.... her fears behind her eyes. sometimes she laughs... for no reason that i can see and my whole world stood still the first time she talked to me... and now i wonder if i'll ever be the one to make her happy...i'll just wait and see. it breaks my heart to see her cry... but it blows my mind when i see her smile i wanna be the one to make her happy... for a little while. maybe today will be the day when i break down and tell her everything i feel... or maybe i'll wait until tomorrow... or maybe tomorrow i'll see her out hanging off his arm like she's in love... and i know that it will turn out like the rest... no...today will be the day... and now i wonder if i'll ever be the one to make her happy...i'll just wait and see. it breaks my heart to see her cry... but it blows my mind when i see her smile i wanna be the one to make her happy... for a little while. yesterday she hugged me tight... there was something in her smile when she looked at me something i had never seen... she's always been that one true friend who's been there for me again and again... and i dont know what to think anymore.. could there be something more... and now i wonder if i'll ever be the one to make her happy...i'll just wait and see. it breaks my heart to see her cry... but it blows my mind when i see her smile i wanna be the one to make her happy... for a little while. "it's like you're always stuck in second gear..." [This message has been edited by SlowDrag (06-10-2002 02:37 AM).] |
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Marge Tindal![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Eric~ I popped in here to tell you that I think this is just a wonderful piece~ Delicately sincere it is .... and that's what makes it so lovely~ Keep on strummin'~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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~*brittt*~ Member
since 2001-05-09
Posts 76East Haddam, CT |
OMG OMG OMG!!! thats totally gonna be like..a hit song! for real that was so sweet and i think that if you cant straight out tall her, then give her that song or sing it to her cuz its a perfect expression of feelings and its totally sweet!!! |
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Skyfire![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
I just want to say that this is very well done. You express your emotions and your feelings for her very well. Geeze this reply sounds cold. Go for her!!!!! ![]() |
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Very well written. I wish I knew the melody of it all so I could sing along, but the lyrics were just fine. What kind of song would this be? which genre? ![]() This message has been brought to you by the letter 'Y' |
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SlowDrag Member
since 2002-01-10
Posts 53Tx...need i say more |
i dunno, i have 2 different styles in my head...pretty much the same melody just played different ways one's slower...just kind of a mellow song... the other is upbeat...kinda punkish - rock...like hmm like that jimmy eat world song...the middle or whatever.....not too fast or heavy but too fast to be a slow song. and all i wanna do is be there for the things you're going through....well is it good for you?...is it good for you? |
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Dopey Dope![]()
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Yeah I know what you're talking about. I play guitar as well. I write a lot of songs and lyrics....I hope to see more of your work around. I enjoyed this one. ![]() This message has been brought to you by the letter 'Y' |
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