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keoni
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Up in the mountains in the NFC

0 posted 2001-08-06 04:14 PM



Conformity is unknown to me
Conformity is blasphemy
Conform to be, their perfect little soldier
Ignorance of self
Ignorance is wealth, and I am poor
War, in the confines of my own mind
Should I be my own person
Resistance is futile, it will only worsen
The situation, hopelessness and frustration
Why try, when we’re bred to die
For this great land
Life slips through our fingers like a grain of sand
Born into bondage, captive of society
The chains on my soul are tightened inside of me

Conform, control, release my soul
Insane, my brain, trembles with fear
Look back, react, to the sight of nothingness
Death, despair, cleanse the air
My sight, obscured, my vision blurred
Purge, the earth, and hail rebirth
Fight to win, overthrow the sin
Embrace, its death, take your first free breath

Can’t fight the war in a peaceful matter
I want to run through the streets
And set fire to the suburbs
I hate your houses, they all look the same
Identified by serial number, got no use for a name
Perfect family, perfect world, perfect job
But you know mommy’s a drunk and daddy’s a slob
As long as you work 9 to 5
And show up at church on Sunday
You are an upstanding member of society
I am a worthless waste of space
Cannot find my place
Complacency is a sin
If you live to die, you will not win
Open your eyes for the first time and you’ll see
It’s lonely on the outside, but at least you’re free

Conform, control, release my soul
Insane, my brain, trembles with fear
Look back, react, to the sight of nothingness
Death, despair, cleanse the air
My sight, obscured, my vision blurred
Purge, the earth, and hail rebirth
Fight to win, overthrow the sin
Embrace, its death, take your first free breath

Embrace, its death, take your first free breath

"Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine
"Only God can judge me" Tupac Shakur

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chasing rain
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since 2001-05-15
Posts 737
Canada
1 posted 2001-08-06 04:39 PM


For a title that sounds so refreshing..I find myself stifled by darkness. I wasn't expecting that...refreshing in a way...hehe.  

This was well written, deep and dark. A very thought-provoking poem...gave me something to ponder over...Well done!

-Leah

Va pensiero sull' ali dorate...

Spice
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since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266
Resting in my cardboard box.
2 posted 2001-08-06 11:47 PM


Wow! I LOVED this..The 3rd stanza was my favorite. How everything on the outside looks so perfect...but the mom is a drunk and dad is a slob etc etc...and the whole church thing. EXCELLENT piece, In the library it goes.

You wouldn't worry about what people thought about you if you knew how seldom they did.

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3 posted 2001-08-08 01:18 AM


I really liked the thoughts in this one Keoni. Well thought out here. Awesome job. I loved the style of the 2nd stanza and the like. Pretty good job  

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

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4 posted 2001-08-08 02:13 AM


The whole format and style of this poem was very impressive.  I LOVED the third stanza, and the last lines.  Very nicely done!  I really enjoyed this one.

--Marie

You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning.

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5 posted 2001-08-08 02:49 AM


greAT POEM ME LIKES!
ROBIN

i don't give up without a fight so boys beware!

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